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jjote
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0 posted 2015-01-31 09:11 PM




my grandson wakes up early, excited
on the first morning of our weekend trip.
look grandma, a boat, a bridge...
can I go out and wade in the water
run across the bridge, then ride on the boat?
i'll be good, eat my cereal, drink my juice, please, please.
(not necessarily in that order, I thought. I'm not his mom
so thank goodness, it's not my decision to make.
but his mom and dad are sleeping late, and grandma
is as excited as he, or never sleeps late anyway,
life is getting shorter by the day, why waste it
when very soon, sleep will take forever)

so much activity my grandson is planning for his day,
I'm already exhausted, just thinking of it -
all I want is to soak in the quiet stillness
this peaceful collage of muted hues
the sky, wanting cloud and color, shark-grey,
blue-white and haughty, all blurring together,
in the pale thin light of a new day -
empty, innocent - as yet unsullied -
a universe of somber mystery...

but he is just a child
it will be a lot of years more
when such thoughts will creep into his mind
prefer silent moments than the boisterous
and in his innocence now, as yet unsullied,
I revel in the luxury of his universe.
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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2015-01-31 10:50 PM


This is just beautiful, jjote. The exuberance of children is a wondrous thing even though it can be trying at times. I so loved this . . .
quote:
when very soon, sleep will take forever

Yes indeed, but as you mentioned it will take your grandchild many years before he can understand such things.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

latearrival
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2 posted 2015-02-01 12:47 PM


Enjoyed this sweet story.Jo
jjote
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3 posted 2015-02-01 09:07 AM


Thank you
both for stopping by. And Jerry, you caught that line about sleeping forever.  I think of that everynow and then, when will that  thief in the night come...not being somber here

Margherita
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4 posted 2015-02-03 05:29 PM


I love this very much, dear Josefina, as I can relate. But what you call "sleep will take forever" isn't my own idea of "moving on". That would be rather boring ... "rest in peace" doesn't necessarily mean total inactivity. But we shall surely get a rest from our earthly worries, yes. So, let's enjoy our life down here and when our time comes to move on, we shall open our eyes within a new existence.

Hugs.
Margherita

tracie66
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5 posted 2015-02-25 05:10 AM


Absolutely beautiful

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                        — W. E. Channing

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2015-02-28 08:21 PM


wonderful....james
jjote
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7 posted 2015-02-28 11:36 PM


sorry for the late reply but thanks Margherita, tracie and James for your posts.  appreciate.

Pilgrimage
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8 posted 2015-03-02 12:28 PM


Children have a gift of drawing us into their world.  I like the way you wrote this, especially the quiet contemplation in the middle stanza.  It gave pace to the poem.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Rex Allen McCoy
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9 posted 2015-03-02 01:20 PM


i hope this spring finds many new experiences for us all to enjoy with our children or grandchildren
jjote
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10 posted 2015-03-02 11:24 PM


thanks Nan & Rex and yes, grandchildren are my source of inspiration for poems these days
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