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redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN

0 posted 2014-12-17 10:53 PM


Most of you won't remember this, but this is how you turn a poem into a song. It wasn't actually a poem though, it was just a "note". Critiques welcome!
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=39466&content=music

If I ever had to choose, between life and lovin you
I know where my heart would stand
and if I ever had, everything to lose
I'd put it all right in your hands

Cus everything you've given me
and all that you are
is more than I could ever hope to be
look into my eyes, you can see, read my mind
You're the best part of me

If you ever have a doubt, we can talk it out
I want you to know I'm here
I can take the tears, you can cry outloud
you've got nothing to fear

CHORUS

Bridge:
You can hold the love inside
Baby I can see you're trying
there's something you wanna say
Don't let me get in your way
I'm on your side

If you think you're gonna fall
when your back's against the wall
hold on to me, I'm strong
Nothing you would you ever say
could make my heart turn away
I'll be with you through it all

CHORUS

Kay-lynn
"When you help someone across the river, you get there yourself"


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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2014-12-18 08:38 AM


Great song lyrics, and what makes it great is the fact that you are telling your love nothing he could say would make you turn away. The song has that theme, and is a true blue country song.

~*~ When politicians give up on liberty, it falls to poets to preserve it. Or write its epitaph. ~*~

Redstart
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since 2014-05-16
Posts 535

2 posted 2014-12-18 09:07 AM


I really enjoyed listening to this song. An ear-catching intro, and a great voice with a lovely country twang. I'm sure the lack of communication was over when the person to whom it was dedicated heard the song.
latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
3 posted 2014-12-18 11:40 AM


Enjoyed. Thank you Jo Perry
latearrival
Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
4 posted 2014-12-18 11:40 AM


Enjoyed this very much.Thank you, Jo Perry
redwriter1
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 480
Franklin, TN
5 posted 2014-12-18 03:31 PM


thank you for the replies. It really means alot. Also goes to prove, just say what you mean and add 3 chords (smile)

Kay-lynn
"When you help someone across the river, you get there yourself"


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