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Martie
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0 posted 2014-12-11 12:36 PM



Come morning
I see as geese do the river
because the sky to my eye
is what geese see

Sound holds them together
formation affirmation
the river a path to the green pleated grass
and the woven fields of corn
even bright heads of sunflowers
to the vine-covered trees
blackberry brambles and tule grasses
of the delta

That cool delta breeze
makes a song from just leaves
and blesses the wind chimes
awake through the night
in the quiet forgotten

Shadows fall from houses
where heat closes windows
and kisses tomatoes
until plump and ready
to settle the meaning
that was never a question

I thought that the sun
slipping into the ocean
had the curve of a love song
wrapped in its cheek
until I saw it melt
in the river beside me
swallowing diamonds
around my bare feet

Softly the pigeons sip from the morning
dipping reflection from just watered lawns
knowing life is always delirious with change
and lasting like love and front doors
finds the way home just like geese do
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© Copyright 2014 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 2014-12-11 12:43 PM


Oh Martie, the fourth and fifth stanza's are so beautiful and descriptive. This is a fantastic poem. We've (at least me Heh.Heh) have missed your poetic skills.

Dammit I'm Mad is Dammit I'm Mad spelled backward.

jwesley
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2 posted 2014-12-11 01:15 PM


Definitely miss your writing, my friend - and you haven't lost a beat since last I read you.

Beautiful, poignant piece ... loved it.


jimmy

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3 posted 2014-12-11 02:05 PM


Beautiful Martie. Welcome back you have been missed. jo
BluesSerenade
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4 posted 2014-12-11 06:08 PM


What a nice surprise to read you here today Martie. Your poetry is so pretty and full of wisdom from a life well lived.

Or so that's my take and I'm sticking to it.     missed you...

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 2014-12-11 07:55 PM


It is a treat to read you again! We are glad you stopped by for the Holidays!
Marchmadness
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6 posted 2014-12-12 04:36 AM


Just beautiful, Martie. What a gifted poet you are.
                                   Ida

2islander2
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7 posted 2014-12-12 08:31 AM


very beautiful verses, indeed, reading them, i can't imagine it is winter in Sacrmamento, it is surprising


yann


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8 posted 2014-12-12 01:12 PM


I thought that the sun
slipping into the ocean
had the curve of a love song
wrapped in its cheek
until I saw it melt
in the river beside me
swallowing diamonds
around my bare feet


Oh, Martie, Martie, your verses are breathtakingly gorgeous!

Such a gift that you came in here, please do that more often, for you are pure inspiration!

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Martie
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9 posted 2014-12-12 03:59 PM


Jerry Pat…thanks for being so quick to comment and for letting me know what you enjoyed.  It is good to see you here holding the fort.

Hi Jimmy…nice to see you.  Thanks so much for reading.

Hi Jo…thanks for the "welcome back"

Hi Lori…I hope all is well in your life.  It's nice to see you too!

Thanks for such a nice comment Ida.

Yann…I didn't write that poem in winter…it's just a look at the things in Sacramento that I love.  It's been raining & cold today.

Margherita  You have an amazing way of making someone feel very special.  Thanks for the lovely review.  I think you are the one that is special.



Redstart
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10 posted 2014-12-13 08:57 PM


Alive with empathy for nature, and a treat to read.

icebox
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in the shadows
11 posted 2014-12-13 11:07 PM


Wonderful imagery.

Geese never grow old.

Grouse
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12 posted 2014-12-28 05:52 PM


Martie .... some things, like your gift, never change. Hello. RMW
Marchmadness
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13 posted 2014-12-29 11:25 PM


Beautiful imagery, Martie. I feel as though I an there.
                           Ida

Sunshine
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14 posted 2014-12-29 11:46 PM


quote:
formation affirmation
the river a path to the green pleated grass
and the woven fields of corn
even bright heads of sunflowers
to the vine-covered trees
blackberry brambles and tule grasses
of the delta

Pleated grass...
woven fields...
tule...

Only you make visual, reality...

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
15 posted 2015-01-23 06:57 PM


wonderful...james
secondhanddreampoet
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16 posted 2015-01-23 10:16 PM


grand-fine magnificent imagery ...

I am especially fond though, of the line:

"...life is always delirious with change"

great writing!

Goldenrose
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17 posted 2015-01-27 11:21 AM


Descriptions of delight, such imagery you let us peep at, but only you can see the magic behind how the world ticks...loved this poem Martie..thank you..hope you are well?

Goldenrose.

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