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Writing Poetry in the Dark
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Writing Poetry in the Dark |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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https://soundcloud.com/diana-van-den-berg-2/writing-poetry-in-the-dark silhouette of feline elegance and canine paws on windowsill hypnotising chorus of epauletted fruit bats not a breath of wind stirs the trees shapes of furniture loom out of the gloom in shades of oldworld browns and shadowed greys and background black kitty food bowl shines silver-bright on dressing table invisible dove-grey seascape emerges from my memory time crawls the walls in patterns painted by the moon and I reach for respite out of scrambled stress and slowly slip into ponderings of thises and thats and why’s and hows and the night embraces me and invites my mind into dark-night forest-dance I acquiesce and peace pervades my being I float on nothingness and work guilt rides away on gentle thermals and . . . ah the light returns and wipes out the dark and reveries and dance are gone as if they never were. . . kettle on for tea Owl |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
grand-fine writing ... as always ! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I was there and even saw the extra tea cup put out for me. Thank you for this morning respite. Jo |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I think that is what we call a brown-out or a rolling black-out here. My electricity was out for a couple of hours the other day because of the rain but it doesn't happen often. You certainly wrote a fine poem about it. I should have thought of that. Ida |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Bruce. Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Martyjo, lol! I wish you really were here for a really nice long chinwag! Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
It is not a problem, Ida, that you asked, in my load-shedding poem. I was glad of the opportunity to explain it. We also, in the year 2008 (though somebody said 2000 recently, so it may have been then) when it first started, needed to have it explained to us. It is so frustrating because I can't do any work, and I can't even make a cup of tea! Thank you for your kind words about my poem. Owl |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed...james |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, James. Owl |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
I'm most glad to re-read this 'slice-of-life' write again, 'painted' in such fine imagery! I am especially fond of the line: "time crawls the walls in patterns painted by the moon" |
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Redstart Senior Member
since 2014-05-16
Posts 535 |
Atmospheric and inspiring. So much so, that I'll put out the light, and feel the feel. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
quote: I know that feeling  . Not too bad a place to be once you let go of the guilt one tends to feel embracing it back. The sun always comes up to early.Michael |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Bruce, again, and for particularly liking those lines. Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you for your lovely words, Redstart, and for feeling the poem so much that you want to turn out the light to feel it better. Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Michael. The darkness was imposed on me by South Africa's load-shedding of electricity when I should have been working, so it took me a while to accept the situation. Owl |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Never had imposed darkness other than from storms...always have batteries and flashlights on hand just in case, though. I loved the same lines as Bruce: "time crawls the walls in patterns painted by the moon" I can picture this feeling. M |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you for your kind words, Maureen. The only torch I have is a tiny little pinlight from my cellphone (if the phone is sufficiently charged, and I keep that for emergencies). Owl |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, I like this one. The images are strong and they affect me. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Nan. I am glad you enjoyed it. Owl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"and the night embraces me I live there at times. Exquisite! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Karilea. I am glad that you relate to that. Owl |
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