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2islander2
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0 posted 2014-12-02 12:24 PM


One day, it is good to be self-aware,
To know that we are on the wrong track,
That the earth turns without you,
From Michigan to Nebraska,
Or of the moon in Peru,
That the world does not include the poetry,
The silence is a barley sugar
You are prisoner of yourself as the winter
Whatever you wrote,
The grocer opens his shop,
The secretary fills her files,
With a seriousness
Which takes you, you and your poems
Over the ice-cold lake, beyond the hills
Whose unique witness you are.

[This message has been edited by 2islander2 (12-03-2014 01:58 AM).]

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latearrival
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1 posted 2014-12-02 03:18 PM


When once we really  know who we are and accept this knowledge, it begins to solve a lot of problems we thought we had before. Enjoyed, JO
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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2 posted 2014-12-02 06:23 PM


"Whose unique witness you are."

I love this line!!! Wish it were mine!!!


2islander2
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3 posted 2014-12-03 01:14 AM


thanks jO, your comment brings me some solace and smile, tanks for it


yann

2islander2
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4 posted 2014-12-03 01:15 AM


thanks lori, loved your comment, everyone is unique indeed


yann

jwesley
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5 posted 2014-12-03 01:45 AM


Very, very true, my friend ... and if it wasn't for the "you" in this piece - just think, none of what "you" witness, would be known.

great piece.

jimmy

Margherita
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6 posted 2014-12-06 12:42 PM


Wow, I love this outpour of yours, dear Yann! But no, though you may be right to a certain degree, being able of self-awareness doesn't necessarily mean to under-estimate yourself. You are a divine creation and as such your self-awareness must lead you to know that everything you do and create is of the utmost value and importance. Nothing is for nothing.

And here I am always to appreciate your poetic offerings, which are always of excellent level. Trust me.

Love,
Margherita

Marchmadness
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7 posted 2014-12-12 04:43 AM


But what would the world be without the poets
(witnesses) yann. Bland indeed.
                                   ida

2islander2
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8 posted 2014-12-12 08:00 AM


thanks jwesley, your words are so true and subtle, yes everyone is the unique witness of everything,


thanks


yann


2islander2
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9 posted 2014-12-12 08:03 AM


thanks Margherita, your words are a real and sweet solace, i really don't know if i am underestimating myslf, i feel not like that in this moment, perhaps the poem unveil something i didn't recognize myself, i read your wirds with a specual attention, thanks
yann

2islander2
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10 posted 2014-12-12 08:04 AM


so true ida, and the world is cruel somtimes by not considering that, thanks for the rich comment


yann

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