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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia 
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What I have heard of love Sounds like a try to flee If I’m good enough Then you will be with me If in the shine of stars A supernova seems You will decide at last If you believe my dreams What do you need to fall In or out of love - Me as some kind of girl Nice or unsuited stuff Each my step to the right Just as one to the left Looks as a step aside I’m suspected of theft Maybe I steal your time Maybe I’m worth not much Not much more than a dime Ten a penny and such Didn’t you guess it hurt: Now I’m the only one Next time your broken heart Sings to me “love has gone” Your vacillating voice Echoing through my mind Asking if I’m not yours Doubting if you are mine Your hesitation is tough My everlasting grief What do you mean by love When you repeat your “if” Is it your fear of pain Made you unsure of us Doing its best to stain Things that elude your grasp Yet all the way I thought Love is invariancy If you can love or not Then it’s not you and me . 28/11/2014 . |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Oh my, you have really done well here. It is painful and awkward when one falls in love and the other falls in ambiguity. You have captured it here in your words.  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Wordplay from a person who knows the intricacies of the heart and this strange phenomenon called love. Sometimes we expect too much of that word. If they give you ruled paper write sideways. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Galina, you deserve the very best, not an "if" or anything else other than the very best. Owl |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Gale, i think two things while reading your precious words, love is to choose and when there is love there is pain, i wish he will understand, this is beautiful yann |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Love, in and of itself, is essential an invariable. Love of/for another, a thing, "something", is hugely variable,(in this case, humans)because it always contains two or more and does not become an invariance without effort on the part of both parties towards the maintenance of a relationship, and only works when both parties want the same thing, other than physical gratification. Enjoyed this piece... jimmy |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
quote: Can't help but love that ending. Great writing Gale. You still pluck at the heart strings like few are capable of. Michael |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Galina, you write exceptionally well about this "if" situation. I also liked all the comments. When the feeling of stealing "his" time enters your heart, you should really be aware instead of the fact that your time is a wonderful, generous gift to him. In this light your concluding words are very true. Love, Margherita a smile to brighten your day |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you for reading and for your comments, my friends! They are much appreciated. I don't know if love can be deserved or if love can be different. I can't imagine such options. I know the only thing: love is always a challenge to your fears, to your selfishness and after all to your death. |
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