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whitbypoet1
Junior Member

since 2014-09-02

Posts 40

0 posted 2014-09-02 12:51 PM

She’s a smile in the rain, she’s the sun on the rise
She’s a heavenly angel in mortal disguise,
She is birdsong on evenings when time is stood still
She is sacred and pure, like a prayer on a hill,
She bears wisdom and patience of every degree
And her thoughts reach much further than eyesight can see,
She’s the stillness of dawn and the first breath of day
And her kiss takes the pain of her children away.

She bears loads with the ease of a whispering breeze
And she’s so aware of the moments to seize
From the mixture of life she is moulded and cast
Like a pure figurine of her future and past,
She touches the air with such delicacy
That there’s barely a ripple upon life’s tired sea,
And she sleeps on a ribbon of silken refrain
Like a song in the night that drifts closer again.

She bears tears with the grace of a silver soft stream
And her soul holds much more that a wish and a dream,
She is wondrous contentment and happiness plied
In her everything lives, and no good things have died,
In her heart there’s no room for dark negative thought
It’s a butterfly Dream Catcher heaven has wrought
And the smile in her eyes drifting gently above
Is a mirror reflecting a woman of love…

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2014-09-02 01:41 PM

This is absolutely gorgeous!! Welcome to Passions... I look forward to reading more of your work!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2014-09-02 04:11 PM

Quite a tribute to women in this your first posting. I, too, welcome you . . .

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2014-09-02 06:15 PM

Welcome to the world of magnificent people and fantastic poetry! Please watch your email for a very Special welcome!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2014-09-02 07:54 PM

A true beauty in every sense of the word.

Welcome welcome, it is a pleasure to have you here, your poem is a breath of fresh air...

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

5 posted 2014-09-22 08:00 AM

She must be an exquisite woman. Enjoyed.

-Trina
I'll keep these dreams hidden
inside these eyes of mine
until my tears fall
unto my tainted hear

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2014-09-22 08:49 AM

She bears tears with the grace of a silver soft stream
And her soul holds much more than a wish and a dream,

Welcome to Passions in Poetry. I really enjoyed your beautiful tribute to this wondrous earthly, yet heavenly creature.

Margherita

Gale
Senior Member

since 2013-06-10

Posts 578
Russia

7 posted 2014-09-23 12:12 PM

Hi, whitbypoet!
A beautiful ode to a woman you've posted!
Nice flow and rhymes )

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

8 posted 2014-09-23 02:49 PM

Wonderful write!

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

9 posted 2015-02-01 06:38 AM

this is beautiful! well written indeed! xx

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2015-02-01 09:15 AM

Woman. A complex. sometimes unsettled in reality because of her duties to her family. To cast woman in such an absolute favorable light was a pure joy for me to read, and she deserves every line of adoration you have given her. I applaud you.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

11 posted 2015-02-01 04:05 PM

Showing the positive sides of most mothers and a lot of caring women. Many great women have earned this beautiful tribute, I have been honored to have met many.

But my inert honesty has to say that this is not how we see all Women as a whole.I love your writing and the beautiful fantasy you write about. Best to you,Jo Perry

changingtides81
New Member
Posts 6
NC, USA

12 posted 2015-02-01 08:28 PM

I find your poem to be a very beautiful, sweet, and moving way to explain the nature of a woman!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2015-02-17 11:20 PM

very nice...james

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

14 posted 2015-02-18 09:29 PM

Enjoyed your works.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

15 posted 2015-02-20 11:20 AM

Outstanding! Enjoyed very much! ~L

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

16 posted 2015-02-21 12:05 PM

You must know such a kind of woman to make you write this in dedication to her. I'm sure if she is real to you. she will be very pleased to read this. Lovely write.

Redstart
Senior Member

since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

17 posted 2015-02-21 12:28 PM

Rhyme and rhythm: splendour in the grass! I guess that you love this lady? You've given her something special here. Just one point: last stanza, second line: 'than' not 'that'. I'd never mention it normally, but perfection catches the eye, and the head.

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