navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #49 » Meandering Thoughts
Open Poetry #49
Post A Reply Post New Topic Meandering Thoughts Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2014-08-25 08:05 AM



I speak of the bayou
it is introduced in many of my poems
Bayou Lafourche
that, then is my bayou's name
and, in the twilight of day
no matter what kind of day it has been
the bayou soothes my troubles
and, if the night is clear
the stars seem to point me in the right direction
it liberates me
in a kind of mystical séance
from the days' stress and tumultuousness
I become enmeshed
within this wonderful moment
alone
watching the dark water
flow slowly by in the light of a pale, pale moon
something takes me over
giving thought to those I know
I see their faces
silently I ask
are we the kind of friends
that my sadness is your sadness
can you experience
and understand my devotion to you
can you feel my anguish
my breath
is it your echo

ahhh . . .
rippling sounds
focus my attention back to Bayou Lafourche
as if it was chastising me
for daring to ask
such personal questions
the ripples become giggles
at this old man
standing quite along
on the bayou's edge
waiting for answers
which will never come
matters not
I have all the answers I really need


~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (08-25-2014 12:26 PM).]

© Copyright 2014 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
suthern
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Seraphic
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723
Louisiana
1 posted 2014-08-25 12:04 PM


I liked every turn of this meander... from the peacefulness of the beginning, through the questions and on to acceptance. Superb!
JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2014-08-25 12:11 PM


Your comments are wonderful suthern, thank you so very much.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 2014-08-25 08:58 PM


When I hear you speak of the bayou, I always feel how at home you are there.  I know you must be, because you write of it in a way I have never felt about anywhere I have lived.  What more answers would one need in such a place?

Michael

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
4 posted 2014-08-26 06:40 AM


Michael is on to something here... there is a special quality to your bayou poems and this one in particular has even more of that special something. Like I have said on many occasions, it is a pleasure taking these walks with you my friend.

Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
5 posted 2014-08-26 07:38 AM


Thank you Michael, I am a fortunate man I know to be where I am at this, the nearness of the end.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
6 posted 2014-08-26 07:39 AM


Good morning Lori, having you walk the banks of the bayou with me is a treat, thank you.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #49 » Meandering Thoughts

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary