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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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 when you marry it never is quite what you think it is marriage is not an address of a house or tent no . . . it is a place before that and make no bones about it it is a cold place you wake up Honeymoon morning standing at the edge of a jungle with an arid wasteland with no maps with which to discover paths, roads, trails to navigate toward utopia no . . . you are alone and follow different paths wrong roads one day you are surprised you’ve come this far but between the two of you you’ve discovered how to kindle flames at last . . . progress ©June 23, 2014 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
The cartoon, how well it portrays how technology is the bigger part of life today than most realize. But your write depicts the separation of the ages. Differences between the 40's through the 80's to the here-and-now... And your closing verse screams: No matter how much the change - it all seems to remain the same. Nice write Jerry!! Enjoyed. JL  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
JL, thank you buddy for dissecting my poem so eloquently. I'm honored and appreciative. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Yeah Jerry, I think JL really nailed it as far as responses go... I love your metaphor because you are right about learning to kindle the flame is progress...Success is in tending that fire so it doesn't go out, but if it should, staying with it and rekindling. Another good one to wake up to my friend. Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Lori, thank you for your thoughts this morning. Hope everything is okay in Kansas. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Cute!, my friend. Certainly happy that's not how mine went/has gone. Sure wouldn't have lasted the 40 years it has. I'd have left it/her in the dust! enjoyed . . . j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Good morning Jimmy, I hear you talking. Unfortunately, similar things happened to me, or happened because of me. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Redstart Senior Member
since 2014-05-16
Posts 535 |
I was just imagining the look on the faces of the bride and groom, and the guests, if this were read out at a wedding. It's pessemistic, but validly so, as 60% of marriages end in divorce, and the rest need saint-like understanding to get to the flame-kindling stage. You always tell it like it is, Jerry. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks Redstart. The generation that took their marriage vows seriously has been lost forever for the most part. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Be11a New Member
since 2014-07-01
Posts 4New York City |
truly a road paved in compromise and sacrifice ...great poem ~*~beLLa~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, beLLa, and you are so right. ~*~ When politicians give up on liberty, it falls to poets to preserve it. Or write its epitaph. ~*~ |
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kingsangel Member
since 2009-11-04
Posts 50 |
Love this !!! May have to print it and have it with me when I remarry and have a honey moon |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Kingsangel. ~*~ Tell the truth, but tell it slant.--Emily Dickimsom ~*~ |
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