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JL
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0 posted 2014-06-23 11:18 PM



Out of control… my impression.

Helpless to your smile without doubt,

yet… more entranced by your heart,

your song and verse.


Words to speak… my failing

None to rhyme in sugar sweet phrasing,

but when I find them,

my impression… out of control.

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2014-06-24 11:19 AM


How unadorned and unabashedly romantic. I loved it.

Lori

JL
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2 posted 2014-06-24 02:53 PM


I hope it found you smiling.
Thank you for the great reply.
(Made me smile)....

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2014-06-24 04:03 PM


Hey there good to see you here JL.  
This is so pure and passionate.  No need for sweets or rhyme time.  

Really nice reading, this is my kind of poetry.

latearrival
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4 posted 2014-06-24 04:34 PM


"Helpless to your smile without doubt"

Yes JL it was the smile and the twinkle in his eyes that took me in.I understand. Good to see you here.  Love this post.Jo Perry

JerryPat2
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5 posted 2014-06-24 04:45 PM


Hah! Been a long while, man, good to see you back. Loved this stunning bit of romantic directness!

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JL
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6 posted 2014-06-24 06:25 PM


Thanks, Blues!!  There is always time for sweets and Rhyme...

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Thank you Jo!  Glad you had the living experience.

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Thanks JP... nothing like out and out directness.
Good to be back too...

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

OwlSA
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7 posted 2014-06-25 01:40 PM


Lovely, JL.

Owl

JL
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8 posted 2014-06-25 05:10 PM


Thanks, Owl.

I do appreciate the reply.

JL


jwesley
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9 posted 2014-06-25 05:50 PM


Well ... good to see you JL!  Not in here a bunch anymore, but not to see a number of the oldies but goodies still here when I make it in.

Enjoyed this.  As said above in more than one way ... romantic!

jimmy

JL
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10 posted 2014-06-25 08:02 PM


Thank you, mister.  Kind of you to reply.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Honeybunch
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11 posted 2014-06-28 02:58 PM


Enjoyed, JL!  Good to see you here.

Helen

JL
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12 posted 2014-06-28 10:46 PM


Thank you Helen.

JL

Redstart
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13 posted 2014-06-30 06:06 AM


Succinct, yet fully passionate.
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