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EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2014-06-08 05:30 PM



Rembember when
the sun shone cancer free
and kissed your bones with vitamin D
and you swang shoeless as a mockingbird
with painted toes smiling into the sky

and a field brimmed with all possibility
and you could balance on a cloud wisp
and stare into the dark with the
flight of a lightening bug

remember when the grass climbed backwards
running away gleefully into the sky
and dreams flourished like bubbles
spreading across the ocean,
unclaimed and for the taking

remember when boys were still icky
and you and your friends snickered
at their awkwardness?

remember life

before a boy broke your heart?

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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2014-06-08 06:02 PM


Yep. Boys were and are the culprits then as they are now. I have heard a rumor that scientists are working on making women so perfect men will finally not be needed. What a glorious day that will be.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (06-08-2014 07:09 PM).]

EmmaRose
Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376
Midwest
2 posted 2014-06-08 06:28 PM


Ha Ha Ha...ya got me laughin!!!
Cool response !!!

latearrival
Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
3 posted 2014-06-08 06:42 PM


EmmaRose,Indeed I can remember back to fourth grade when I had my first crush on Bobby. How cute and sweet were those innocent days.I am afraid the young today have advanced too fast into  things we had no idea of then. Best to you, jo

[This message has been edited by latearrival (06-08-2014 09:20 PM).]

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
4 posted 2014-06-08 07:04 PM


Hmmm - most of that was "...'fore my time'" as Kenny Rogers said in "The Ballad of Calico" album ... and, ah-hem, I was (mostly still am) a "boy" and Never found "us" icky, and I Never tripped over myself . . . well, maybe around girls, but "icky"???  And the only broken heart I was around was the one some girl(s) gave me to carry home!!

Ha!  Loved it, my friend and enjoyed it much!

jimmy

amk377
Member
since 2009-08-11
Posts 58
South Carolina
5 posted 2014-06-13 07:19 AM


This is so lovely! And yes I can "remember when" )

"If you can dream it, you can achieve it"

Carousel
New Member
since 2014-06-11
Posts 4

6 posted 2014-06-14 09:04 AM


I think your poetry is cut above as it carries incite in the careful phrasing. No critique just enjoyed the reading.

Nice one.
Cari

MICHELMAS
Member
since 2012-02-15
Posts 305
Lancashire England
7 posted 2014-06-16 03:48 AM


Oh yes, I remember when
Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
8 posted 2014-06-17 01:41 PM


Yes, I remember "when" but thanks for reminding me with such a lovely poem.
                             Ida

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