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0 posted 2014-05-31 11:40 PM



Moon Less Evening Shade

Now, I wander,
having played
with thought
and twine
having encompassed
what is not mine,
moon less wander,
evening’s shade,
skies in cover,
stars evade…

will it rain me snow
on high, or cover me with
ice in cry

I but be a poet, weak
engaged in thought of quiet speak
beat I no drum,
but still, I seek
the truth, the truth
would I beseech,

the truth, the truth,
is it in reach?

I come to a quandary,
and its fade,
and jade, the color green,
is what I encounter
day by day
and envy is
its other name
or so, a poet would say…

understood, no, I am not,
but not by my own consent,
for I would understood then be,
but how many limbs
be bent?

This responsible
person in me
should grasp the say
       carpe diem
and hold it all the way

letting me understand
those who, not me,
those whose grasp is less my own
as I, in quiet, be,

less more my thoughts before I speak,
less evil become my tongue,
I seek an answer,
swift, to me,
as I seek it, rung, by rung…

find me now backbone of heaven
break me bread if it unleavened,
salt my soul
if wounds would bleed
and in quandary, find lemons in need…

as I would gather me quiet
in
this moon less evening shade…

(from the 2003 archives....)

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2islander2
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1 posted 2014-06-01 01:36 AM


fine penning, i guess i am not a poet too, if you aren't, thanks for sharing these beautiful réflexions


yann

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2 posted 2014-06-01 08:11 AM


Dug in the past to resurrect a fine piece of writing and I thoroughly enjoyed it, Karilea. I was especially drawn to this grouping of words . . . This what I think of as "writing sideways."
quote:
will it rain me snow
on high, or cover me with
ice in cry


~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

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3 posted 2014-06-01 10:10 AM


Yann, thank you for your eyes...but Sir, you are Poet...

and Jerry...those lines like me fine...for it shall be.

Thank you, gentle men.

Michael
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4 posted 2014-06-01 02:43 PM


This is beautiful K.  Intriguing as well.  Oh, to be understood...  I once longed for that.  Understanding others has proven a far more fruitful quest however.  Only when you learn to see through other's eyes do you become capable of discerning uniqueness, and how it applies to you.... ok, enough rambling.  Great, and thought provoking, read here.

Michael

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5 posted 2014-06-02 08:19 PM


Wow, what a ramble, a clever word laying that really works and is fun to read and reread.
Vastly enjoyed and admired.

Sunshine
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6 posted 2014-06-02 11:33 PM


Michael, Wordancer...thank you both. Michael, you know me well....

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7 posted 2014-06-03 04:40 AM


A most personal, yet extremely intriguing poem that leaves the reader with their own interpretation.
Beneath a moon less evening shade, is beneath no moon at all; a troublesome place to be. A place where chewing the cud is obligatory, and the conscience must be examined thoroughly. To grasp the moment, or let it pass? The conscience will decide, because no-one will ever understand us the way we know ourselves.

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8 posted 2014-06-03 01:14 PM


So good to read you, dear Sissie Sunshine
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9 posted 2014-06-04 12:43 PM


fine writing...James
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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10 posted 2014-06-04 06:10 AM


Always a pleasure Karilea (and sometimes an adventure)

Lori

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11 posted 2014-06-06 12:27 PM


sigh...understanding all too well
Be11a
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12 posted 2014-07-01 11:19 AM


quote:
find me now backbone of heaven
break me bread if it unleavened,
salt my soul
if wounds would bleed
and in quandary, find lemons in need…

as I would gather me quiet
in
this moon less evening shade…



oh...Sunshine...this hits home...as do these blue pages...bittersweet lovliness, as ever~*~

~*~beLLa~*~

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13 posted 2014-07-01 01:54 PM


Karilea,With the stormy unpredictable weather we are all experiencing I can visualize a lot of this write and share the wonder of it all.
A lot more in this.Enjoyed. Jo

Sunshine
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14 posted 2014-07-01 11:39 PM


Thank you all for finding something personal in this, for yourselves.

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