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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2014-05-31 03:07 AM



There’s a problem in say goodbye
When most every night there’s a moon in the sky,
And I can’t help thinking of you.
When a flower just about to bloom
Reminds me why my name is Gloom
Because coming beauty reminds of beauty gone.
A sight that will never renew
And I can’t help thinking of you.
What is left when a love is done
But memories and a problem of moving on.

Gloom

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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2014-05-31 11:45 AM


Oh, this tugs at my heartstrings, dear Professor Gloom! It is exquisitely penned and the conclusion is inevitable.

Peace and enjoy the beauty of the moment, nonetheless.

Margherita

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2014-05-31 09:16 PM


nice...James
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2014-05-31 11:55 PM


You won't be saying goodbye for a long time to come, Professor.

I know some days feel like it...

but your words are here...and so are you.

2islander2
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by the sea
4 posted 2014-06-01 01:25 AM


exquisite and singing for the mind who admire this very original poem


thanks

yann



Marchmadness
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5 posted 2014-06-02 09:06 AM


Sad but skillful writing, Professor Gloom.
                              Ida

Redstart
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6 posted 2014-06-03 06:16 AM


Ah memories, memories. If only we could filter the pleasant from the tortuous.
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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7 posted 2014-06-03 07:18 AM


Professor
The last word of the last line I believe is the kicker for us all...moving on. No matter the situation, I don't think it is easy for any of us and the more tender the heart the harder it is.

Lori

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
8 posted 2014-06-07 10:01 AM


So sad...memories are golden and double edged at the same time.
latearrival
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9 posted 2014-06-07 08:04 PM


Professor Gloom,I think it is time for me to repost this poem. Love does not die when it is over for what ever reason.I have had many who had no choice but to leave me when they had to leave this world,but their love lingers within my heart.Even if they left on their own accord the memories should still bring smiles not gloom.I wish this warmth for you.


I have never felt the love

That others speak about.

I do not understand the pain
Some profess that love has brought.

I never felt that type of love
But,
I have memories that speak,

Of kindness and thoughtful ways
Of rearing youngsters in those days,

Of being busy with just living
And keeping life together.

Memories of sharing thoughts,
Of tears shed,
Over loss of babies never born.

Our daughter, so bright and yet
Found life just too hard to stay.

The son who never lived
Beyond one day.

Tears of sadness and then of Happiness,
Brought on by little things.
And although I often think of all of it.

I do not dwell upon the loss
But share the memories of love.

jo perry Aug 14 2006

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24
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OH
10 posted 2014-07-13 06:25 AM


Maybe this is why some languages have no word translating to goodbye.   When I have said "Goodbye," it seems, when I have least expected it, we meet again to say "Hello."
The older I become, the more I see a cycling affect, perhaps Karma, continually giving opportunities.

Dale Evans and Roy Rogers had it right when they sang, "Happy trails to you until we meet
again".   Reality keeps moving on, but none us know where it will take us.  

As you can tell, I enjoyed reading and reflecting upon your poem.  

miscellanea

Chanson
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11 posted 2014-07-16 05:59 PM


Writing well as usual

I bought my share of mistakes so I might see some interest.
~Dorene

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
12 posted 2014-07-24 11:33 AM


"What is left when a love is done
But memories and a problem of moving on."

I think, this is just me, that love never dies, even if moving on is in the cards, love is always in the hearts.

Enjoyed, Bud!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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