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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2014-05-24 09:30 PM

I'm back in the shadows
looking for a nonexistent name
my yin is mysteriously flaccid and silent
absorbing everything
allowing it to fulfill itself as in repast
depression ripped the petals
from the honest that was my face
my smile a parched caricature
of what it used to be

remembering crumpled notes
left in squalid hotel rooms
words written in desperation
loses its impact
in the folds and tucks and crumple
then read by absolute strangers
in the light of day
by then the notes
comes off as contemptible
ah, the horrifying splendor which is life
bewildering and confusing
it shouldn't be that way
I blame it on yin
I never, ever speak of yang

~*~ The poor wish to be rich, the rich wish to be happy, the single wish to be married, and the married wish to be dead. ~*~

Redstart
Senior Member

since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

1 posted 2014-05-24 09:52 PM

At times the scales are unbalanced. Yin weighs heavy, but to see the shadows there must be light. Sometimes it takes some finding, but yang is always there. A deep and touching write.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2014-05-24 10:25 PM

I appreciate that you have read my poem and commented on it. I very much liked this . . . "to see the shadows there must be light."

~*~ The poor wish to be rich, the rich wish to be happy, the single wish to be married, and the married wish to be dead. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2014-05-25 06:45 AM

Another great write! I am just partial to this style Jerry. I adore your last line.

Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2014-05-25 07:13 AM

Thank you so much Lori for you kind comments on my poem this morning. You are sweet.

~*~ The poor wish to be rich, the rich wish to be happy, the single wish to be married, and the married wish to be dead. ~*~

wordancer
Senior Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 809
VA

5 posted 2014-05-25 11:58 AM

ah, the horrifying splendor which is life
bewildering and confusing

These lines made me gasp and have most certainly captured life, especially 'for me' the phase... horrifying splendor.

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