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Open Poetry #49

After the Song

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2014-04-11 12:35 PM

She would hum and pour,
Till she didn’t need the hum
And she didn’t need the glass,
She couldn’t remember the songs sung
Or any memories of the past,
Then she’d drink some more.

Seems there’s another day
Just to wake and suffer through,
She’d just leave it all once more
Quietly, to softly wonder away,
Something she is known to do
Departing terminal as times before.

So with her dress in a sack, clothes on her back
She left to go somewhere, another anywhere.

Gloom

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2014-04-11 06:22 AM

I like this Gloom! I like that you did it from a female perspective. I also like that it can be taken literally or metaphorically.
I didn't like that I could relate...ah, but such was life.

Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2014-04-11 08:34 AM

Like Lori, I relate in big time reality. I had two lost decades where I proved your point over and over again, from a male's perspective of course, but still . . .

~*~ Love is friendship set on fire. ~*~

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

3 posted 2014-04-11 11:48 AM

Such is life. Very easy to visualize, Professor.
You painted her well.

Misc

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2014-04-12 08:43 AM

powerful 'slice-of-life' reality write !

some of us, who are 'trapped rats,' wish we could just leave for another somewhere ...

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

5 posted 2014-04-12 10:52 AM

Thank you all,
This female perspective, is just a character,
A character in a story I am writing
and now writing the poetic version.
your support is appreciated.

Gloom

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