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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2014-04-04 04:48 PM


Once upon a time upon the North Shore
there walked a maiden fair
into the unexpected
and completely unparalleled
that sapped her sanity
then left her like a feather
suspended in mid-air.

No wind or force of storms
can make her disappear
and no lightning bolts
can reignite the times
that live silently
in the depths of mind.  

There is no substance
and no weight of meaning
to her existence
but she breathes and breaths again
while looking up and looking down
in utter bewilderment.

A feather in the air?
That surely isn’t  fair!

Helen / 4 April 2014


© Copyright 2014 Helen - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2014-04-04 04:58 PM


Oh, Helen, I fear this isn't just a tale you've told, but much closer to the truth. I loved what you did with the poem, the concise manner you told the story, not an unwelcome pause in the lines. And no, my dear . . .
quote:
A feather in the air?
That surely isn’t  fair!,

~*~ In America, anyone can become president. That's the problem. ~*~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
2 posted 2014-04-04 05:08 PM


No fooling you, Jerry.     Life is just a story anyway, right?  Thanks for the read.
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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South Louisiana
3 posted 2014-04-04 05:34 PM


You betcha!

~*~ In America, anyone can become president. That's the problem. ~*~

XOx Uriah xOX
Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403
Virginia
4 posted 2014-04-10 06:47 AM


::smiles::
latearrival
Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
5 posted 2014-04-10 11:51 AM


Honey, Life is a game of give and take.Love is a ticklish sensation around the heart that sometimes drives us crazy. Best to you, Jo
secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
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a 'Universalist' !
6 posted 2014-04-12 08:39 AM


I believe we are all those "feathers in the air" ...

especially interesting point:

"no lightning bolts
  can reignite the times
  that live silently
  in the depths of mind."

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
7 posted 2014-04-12 11:51 AM


Thanks everyone.  Yes, Bruce, I think we are.
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
8 posted 2014-04-12 08:15 PM


very nice...James
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