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latearrival
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0 posted 2014-02-17 04:24 PM



Posting here as I did not mean to take advantage of Richy's word story.But thank those who replied to it.

My Last Dance

I could not bear to think I would be down under deep within the ground,

with only rows of name markers.It is too dark and sounds so finite.

I would dread to be seen only within a Granite slab   that bore my name.

I am free outside

I would choke and not be able to breath or see the world around me.

I need to gulp and take in the air and sounds of birds chirping and sense the smell of roses.

I live in the outside world.

Please keep me here.

cremate me and send

me up in holiday pyrotechnics

Where I would turn and twirl and light up the sky in my last dance of freedom .

If I then come down to earth and fertilize the ground

or land in water and feed the fish,

I would have done my last good deed

Jo Perry February 17 2014

[This message has been edited by latearrival (02-18-2014 07:26 AM).]

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2014-02-17 04:32 PM


I feel the same way. Don't know about Richy, but I like this.

~*~ Life is simpler when you plow around the stump. ~*~

Bluesy Socrateaser
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2 posted 2014-02-17 05:11 PM


There is a great feeling of joy here:
quote:
"send me up in holiday pyrotechnics
Where I would turn and twirl and light up the sky in my last dance of freedom".


I'm so glad you posted it!

Regards from Bluesy


...just bein' Bluesy

Richy
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3 posted 2014-02-17 08:38 PM



this is very beautiful jo..

thanks again for sharing it with us all

it is very special


latearrival
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4 posted 2014-02-17 10:02 PM


Thank you Richy,Blusey and Jerry Pat. I appreciate your kindness.I am not good at getting it in that box correctly.I have it spaced better on my notes.
And to Richy, it was my reply to your wonderful word post. thanks to you three, for your kind words.  jo

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 2014-02-17 11:01 PM


Jo this is great.  I'm glad you took the idea and ran with it. Bluesy picked my favorite line.

Line  

latearrival
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6 posted 2014-02-17 11:09 PM


Thank you Lorie.I appreciate this coming from one so talented. jo
Marchmadness
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7 posted 2014-02-17 11:10 PM


Couldn't agree more, Jo.
                      Ida

latearrival
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8 posted 2014-02-18 01:44 AM


Thank you Ida , jo
OwlSA
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9 posted 2014-02-18 04:01 AM


I absolutely love this, Martyjo, as I said in Rich's poem - I was going to say especially the twirling bit, but then realised that I love all the rest of it just as much, lol!  

Owl


latearrival
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10 posted 2014-02-18 07:30 AM


Thank you Diana. Your words of praise delight me and entice me to try a bit more. love to you, jo
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