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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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If you are quiet, you can hear the footsteps rest, on the landing where the cold seeps in. I remember waiting a lifetime of moments at the window, my hands upon the frozen glass cracking under my fingers like lightening, all the way down a dark road, so pitch black you can't tell if it comes or goes.. I crush the dry petals in my pockets where I hid the summer, deep down to drown the sound of slick ice and snow, but I am quiet so I can hear you come home. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Touching and lovely poem, Kaoru. Ida |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
The reached out and caressed my heart. ~*~ Life is simpler when you plow around the stump. ~*~ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Beautifully penned... Makes me want to rush home and see if anyone's quietly waiting... Besides the dog  Enjoyed this piece |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Touching, lightly stepping read. Much enjoyed. Michael |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I crush the dry petals in my pockets where I hid the summer, deep down to drown the sound of slick ice and snow, but I am quiet so I can hear you come home. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ You have written a quiet beauty Kaoru. Your poem brings me a sense of peace and serenity. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Just Beautiful, my friend --- as always from you. jimmy |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
"I crush the dry petals in my pockets where I hid the summer, deep down to drown the sound of slick ice and snow," I have also chosen these lines.Lovely.Jo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
nice...James |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Soft and serene. A very pleasurable time in reading. ...just bein' Bluesy |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
I love the hidden Summer here. Beautiful and most potent poem |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
You have wonderful unique phrases here that stir the heart. Very enjoyable reading. Lori |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I have probably told you this before, Kaoru, but if I haven't, I have certainly thought it many times - you have poetry in your soul. This is exquisite, as always. You are an expert at "show, don't tell" and if I were still teaching English, I would ask your permission to use this poem with all my classes as a wonderful example of what excellent poetry is, and we would dissect every bit of it and discuss each bit at length and find only perfection and put it back together again exactly as it is, with each piece fitting like a jigsaw puzzle seen from a distance and therefore without the joins showing, and then we would discuss it again in its entirety. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! Owl |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Owl, I thank you sincerely and I'm flattered by your comments. I appreciate that more than you will ever know. Thank you again .. |
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