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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast

0 posted 2014-01-31 07:47 AM


you had some of that morning sun on your grin
like lipstick casual, a cigarette flavor of hello
and your eyes were long fingers slowly touching

I admired your assets, how they knew your denim
and you kept adjusting the fit in front of me
like my glances were attempting to undress you

I counted bottles of whiskey when you turned away
for a reason to know how you would fit my smile
if you were ever to slip and fall across my whispers

perhaps, just long enough for a thousand introductions

_______________

daark

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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2014-01-31 08:18 AM


quote:
if you were ever to slip and fall across my whispers


I am smiling even though without the morning sun, as Rome is flooded with heavy rain, but your poem brought a true moment of joy with its brilliance.

You were missed.

Margherita


Dark Stranger
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West Coast
2 posted 2014-01-31 08:21 AM


Ms Mar...you are always a blessing to my humble penspeak..thank you

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2014-01-31 08:45 AM


Dude!!!  What a nice surprise...makes my coffee that much sweeter this morning.  Loved your first verse!!  Reminds me of the lyrics by Rod Stewart..

The morning Sun
When its in you face
Really shows your age
But that don't worry ne darling
In my eyes you're everything...

Hope all is well and good.  Xo


Dark Stranger
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West Coast
4 posted 2014-01-31 08:51 AM


Baby Blue...thank you for the gaze...cool little joint in Cam town that caught my pen.


Margherita
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Eternity
5 posted 2014-02-02 07:05 AM


Enjoyed once again, this deserves another round.


JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2014-02-05 09:15 PM


a pleasure to read...James
Martie
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California
7 posted 2014-02-11 02:40 PM


Good to read you DS
Be11a
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New York City
8 posted 2014-07-01 11:16 AM


daddy~*~

~*~beLLa~*~

Redstart
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9 posted 2014-07-02 07:19 AM


A very distinct and unique style that I've always admired.
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