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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2014-01-29 07:55 AM



it is later than late
shadows simmer like a cold heart
the jukebox plays on
drinking and smoking
it is the jester’s time
den of iniquity
everyone here looking for a score
of some kind
danger lurks inside her faded blue eyes
she doesn’t frighten me
music loud and reedy
a song I don’t know
out of touch
I’m an old country, old rock
kind of guy
blue eyes presses my leg with hers
panic time
jukejoint closes in fifteen minutes
we must choose between reality
and make-believe
I choose make-believe
and press back on her leg

©January 18, 2014 / Jerry Pat Bolton

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© Copyright 2014 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
EmmaRose
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1 posted 2014-01-29 06:24 PM


sounds like the vortex of reality and make believe, not a bad place at all
enjoyed the heart of this

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2014-01-29 06:28 PM


Oh Emma, there was no make believe here. Real life. Real happening. Real people. Thank you very much for reading and commenting on my poem.

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JamesMichael
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3 posted 2014-01-30 08:29 PM


enjoyed...James
Richy
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4 posted 2014-01-30 08:58 PM


hahaha alright that was a goodin.. really enjoyed that one Jerry..

yeah pressing back is good.. sometimes haha


JerryPat2
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5 posted 2014-01-31 05:32 AM


Thanks James.

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JerryPat2
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6 posted 2014-01-31 05:33 AM


Appreciate your thoughts, Richy.

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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7 posted 2014-02-02 10:40 AM


     "I choose make-believe
     and press back on her leg"

I love the way you so tell it like it is Jerry.

Lori


JerryPat2
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8 posted 2014-02-02 10:47 AM


Hello again, sha, and thank you. In those days I was full up to my eyes in make-believe.

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2islander2
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9 posted 2014-02-02 11:12 AM


a so vivid scene, i love the emotion of it, and the intimate dialogue born from the music, this is delicate and full of interest,

thanks a lot


yann

JerryPat2
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10 posted 2014-02-02 11:41 AM


Appreciate your very kind words, Yann, just rehashing old memories.

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Rex Allen McCoy
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11 posted 2014-02-02 08:53 PM


last time i staggered around one of these joints, I couldn't feel my leg

enjoyed

JerryPat2
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12 posted 2014-02-02 08:56 PM


Hah! I hear you Rex. Thank you for reading and commenting.

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latearrival
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13 posted 2014-02-02 09:38 PM


Jerry Pat,You lived in another world than I. I Often thanked my lucky stars that I went beyond convention and married just a few months before I turned 17. I missed the games people play and the hurt and mistakes.I was too busy after that not "playing house" but making a home for us and then our children. I was also young enough to enjoy the life and lucky too to have started out on a Cul De Sac so other families were around with small children and learned and helped each other to grow and parent.I was the youngest mom until another young woman moved across the street. We are still friends to this day although many States apart. This makes me read and learn and understand how life dealt out the cards to others. Thank you for  the stories. Jo
JerryPat2
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14 posted 2014-02-02 11:02 PM


Jo, thank you for your wonderful comments. It makes me happy to know that you did not have to deal with the ugly. I almost have tears in my eyes thinking about it. Love you.

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