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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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we are born innocence personified held in hand from our mother’s body spanked (do they still do that?) and laid down first order of business learn gravity we develop emotions mental power stunning our kindergarten teacher first one to raise their hand our unsullied faces innocent eyes look around at the unknown taking everything in as the grown-ups the mother and fathers everybody within our sphere clap their hands at the amazing child in their midst ahhh . . . that’s how it goes the almost supernatural attachment brought on by their own inspiration so we collide with life pulling and shoving on a course for our bearing to be whatever is our destiny to be eh, we journey on dogging the boulders and caverns of life assuming (never assume) we have life’s answers but when we come right down to it we haven’t even a hint for nature does not play the same game as we do our so-called answers deceives us that we actually have the answers but no we find out our answers are delusional now what are we to do we’ve no choice we must carry on convincing ourselves we can overcome the wreckage of our life but this time our thoughts look back at all our mistakes we look back far too often that then is the crux of the problem we have come very a long way from than innocence of birth to . . . ©January 8, 2014 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
O to live again, an innocent, guileless child. But we'd miss a lot of fun along the way. Taking the good and the bad , may your happy days always outweigh the sorrowful |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
And I thank you for your very nice comment, Emma. It's difficult for me to even think back to those days of innocence, but I know they were there for me. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
of course they were there and still are in ways you may not be aware of your deep sensitivity in your poetry displaying an open heart is indicative of some innocence that lingers inside you |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Aw, thank you so very much Emma, I think I needed that. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
"We collide with life" "Nature does not play the same game" Simple yet profound observations give depth to this piece. I really enjoyed reading it Liz |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Your much appreciated comments on my poem this morning means much to me, Liz. When I wrote those words, nature does not play the same game something within me felt good. Now I see why. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Jerry, this is a very perspective on life, so true that we are born innocent, and that we only experience life, i like the poem and the rich analysis, however so poetical, have a nice daay yann |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Good day Yann, thank you so much for visiting my poem and commenting so favorably on it. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Yep, I think you pretty well nailed it with this one. Your progression of innocence is dead on. Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you a lot, Lori. From innocence to sometimes innocence near the end. I guess that is a blessing. Maybe. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
A repost The Journey From There to Here Thinking back to graham crackers, and taking naps upon the mat. To fast food servers, filling endless cups of coffee, While old men sit and chat. jo perry Written a few years back |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . . Graham crackers for sure, Jo. Your words sent me back in time and put a smile on my mug. Thank you for that. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I think innocence is a walk in the woods or a day spent at the beach...come to think of it thats what I did and enjoyed when I was young and innocent...James |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you James. Innocence is a much maligned situation. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
ahhh those darn, answers, huh.. i think sometimes their all around us.. we're just not blind enough to see them, speaking for myself of course.. this was really special Jerry I think, therefore I am I hoped, therefore I was  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Ricky. I agree with everything you said. Heh.Heh ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
In the beginning we did not know we were experiencing life.We just lived it as it was presented to us.I remember kindergarten with love because of Miss Finnigan.She had yes, those naps upon the mat I mentioned and we passed out milk in small glass bottles and ate graham crackers with it. But even more, in the closet she had a llttle treasure that amazed and amused us whenever she took it out.A Little monkey puppet that I know we all thought was real, lived in that closet.Kindergarten is the most important class. We start out in school and if that experience is good we go forth with great expectations. MY daughter started out in a horrible kindergarten class.The teacher was a screamer.I was so happy to learn that class was too large and my daughter along with a few others were put into another kindergarten class and that teacher was wonderful. A whole year could have been wasted in a bad first class could be the ruin of many kids. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Jerry Pat, I read all of your interesting thoughtful post but only remarked on the first stop we all had to take. Maybe later I can do more to show my appreciation of your story of life as it is lived. jo |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I recall my kindergarten class as well, along with the naps. Miss Reinhart didn't have a monkey in the closet, but I had something just as good. I had Marilyn, Martha and Mitzi. My "Three M's" is how I refereed to them when I wrote about them by the time I hit the first grade. I was in love with them, or as in love as it was possible for a five-year-old child could be. Wonderful memories, Jo. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Jo, you are a jewel in that you set the standard high for commenting, and don't think I am not aware of that. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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