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EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2013-12-23 07:52 AM



Barely a week in
Winter neuters the landscape
save for the shrill sound
breaking my sleep

are you the one that stays
the course, through the worst
of the wretched days

or the one I once craved for
that haunts unexpectedly,
a desire destined
to remain in utero.

[This message has been edited by EmmaRose (12-23-2013 08:23 AM).]

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paderewski
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since 2011-02-04
Posts 287
Louisiana, USA
1 posted 2013-12-23 09:44 AM


As old man winter "neuters" everything to its barest form, so do the memories shatter the soul.

~*~ Mercedes Benz: A mechanical device that increases sexual arousal in women. ~*~

[This message has been edited by paderewski (12-24-2013 09:55 AM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
2 posted 2013-12-24 09:53 AM


Very intense, captivating poem, dear EmmaRose. I love Jerry's comment and agree.

Love and Peace.
Margherita


Prasad Nataraj
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since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149
Bangalore,India
3 posted 2013-12-24 11:09 AM


fine writing.

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"
prasadnatarajan5.blogspot.com/

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
4 posted 2013-12-24 07:09 PM


Wonderful, my friend! So much longing in the last stanza that it almost screams out.

Well done!

j.

OLIAS
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since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa
5 posted 2013-12-24 10:29 PM


Longing and desolation , nice write, Thanks for sharing.

Is this heaven?

shoeless Joe Jackson.

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