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Grief

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paderewski
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Many, many years ago. Still think of it like yesterday. The poet in me has to put it into words


Grief is passion reversed, it's that and worse,
When we are in despair, a smile is rare.
I'm in pure anguish, and here I languish.
Through the midnight air, a whiff of her hair.

I have prayed to God, I think He's a fraud,
Sitting on His throne, leaving us alone.
I shriek and cry, for a woman gone bye,
My soul's in retreat, some days I don't eat.

I lay silent at night, no will to fight,
My mind is blanched, I recall how she danced.
My heartache is deep, she made me feel cheap,
I suffer for love's death, can't catch my breath.

Love can be two-faced, and tries to erase,
Love full of pride; she was to be my bride.
She chose to let go, and not let it grow,
Shattered around my feet, our love so sweet.

My eyes are cried out, now I want to shout,
Tears did not work, I just felt like a jerk.
I see her sometimes, and she looks sublime,
I want to speak, but turn aside, I'm weak.


~*~ Old is when “getting a little action” means you don't need to take any fiber today. ~*~
© Copyright 2013 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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1 posted 12-13-2013 08:34 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"Grief is passion reversed"

I really enjoyed your opening phrase above Jerry Pat, so true.  You have captured a great deal of thoughts and feelings of grief throughout this piece, nicely penned.

Best wishes,
/Kit

paderewski
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Thanks Kit, I always look forward to your comments.

~*~ Old is when “getting a little action” means you don't need to take any fiber today. ~*~

Gale
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An amazingly written story, very impressive!
Thank you for sharing!
paderewski
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4 posted 12-13-2013 09:21 AM       View Profile for paderewski   Email paderewski   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit paderewski's Home Page   View IP for paderewski

Many thanks Gale. Some things never leave us. This is one of those.

~*~ Old is when “getting a little action” means you don't need to take any fiber today. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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The whole first stanza is powerful! The woeful tale is well told.  Some heartbreaks just never completely let go.


Lori
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Thanks much, Lori. You are correct about those heartaches. Her name was Dolores, and she died last Monday.

~*~ Old is when “getting a little action” means you don't need to take any fiber today. ~*~

EmmaRose
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I feel your pain as I read it, it reaches and touches a common thread in the human race who has lost love at some time
To better days......
paderewski
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I appreciate your kind thoughts Emma. Yes, I suppose everyone who has lost a lover can relate to this poem. That is sad.

~*~ Old is when “getting a little action” means you don't need to take any fiber today. ~*~

Margherita
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The power of your emotions in this poem is tangible, dear Jerry. I am sorry to hear that this woman who touched your heart so deeply dances now in the next dimension. It means that she may know now your feelings.

Exquisitely penned.

Margherita
paderewski
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You are so kind, Margherita. It is strange that something which happened so long ago should rear its ugly head after hearing of her death. But it has . . . Thus the poem.

~*~ Old is when “getting a little action” means you don't need to take any fiber today. ~*~

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Raw
paderewski
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Yes it is, ponderthepoetorrsx. Thank you for being here.

~*~ Old is when “getting a little action” means you don't need to take any fiber today. ~*~

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Jerry pat. I often read your posts but am at a loss to answer. Because I can honestly say I have never felt the grief you have  regarding love.Bud and I married so young we sort of grew up together as far as married life goes. And we were busy and happy raising our family during very poor times.But we enjoyed life and our family. I am so sorry you did not have this experience.You deserved more after having lived through an unhappy child hood. Best to you,Jo  
paderewski
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Oh martyjo, mine is a two decades of life wasted. Yes, I did have a pretty rough childhood, but so have others. At least, through my writing, especially poetry, I have been able to rid myself of most of my demons. I appreciate very much your timely comments. Thank you so much.

~*~ Old is when “getting a little action” means you don't need to take any fiber today. ~*~
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Yes, Jerry, writing, especially poetry, does help.

Perhaps it forces us into a deeper introspection than we would have otherwise, and maybe, in some way, this helps us - if not get rid of the inner demons - at least accept them, learn to coexist with them. Perhaps it leads to realization that we deserve some happiness, some slice of 'good life', in spite of them, or sometimes even - because of them.

CG
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Without my writing I don't think I would be alive today CG. Thanks for you thoughts.

~*~ Your fences need to be horse-high, pig-tight and bull-strong. ~*~

jwesley
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It's the soul in a unique stage of death while unable to die, and though it subsides into the background as time goes on, it never, ever goes away.

Enjoyed this, my friend.

jimmy
paderewski
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Thank you Jimmy, and you are right, it remains with you forever.

~*~ Your fences need to be horse-high, pig-tight and bull-strong. ~*~

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you must have gotten it right, your words make my eyes cry
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