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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia 
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. Have I finally burnt to death in his glare Am I still alive to sink in the night Come from nothing to touch him and gone nowhere Out of mind as soon As out of sight . 08/12/2013 . [This message has been edited by Gale (12-08-2013 01:13 AM).] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow, everything that needed be said in just a few, short, lines, my friend. Very much enjoyed this. jimmy |
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paderewski Member
since 2011-02-04
Posts 287Louisiana, USA |
You got that right, a brief touching of the heat and outta there, never to be seen again. ~*~ If they give you lined paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow. The power of your words amazes me at times. "Am I still alive to sink in the night?" One day will discover you have wings, Galina... and that you are destined to fly far above this. Michael |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
I've found it on the Internet yesterday   I think it could be a good illustration to my piece. Comets and stars are like people aren't they? |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you, Jimmy! I've tried at last to write "briefly" |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you, Jerry! I thought about its fate yesterday. What is next? If our guest escaped from the sunny embrace, will it change our lives, Or it will be only a show. |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you, Michael I would prefer to stay in orbit around him, outer space is so cold |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
very well written! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
As we all "burn out", sooner or later. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I enjoyed this powerful piece Gale. You captured your thoughts well with wonderful imagery and few words. Very much enjoyed. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Bruce, Krawdad, Kit, thank you very much! I see that my poem has changed its name somehow, but its original name was "Schrodinger's Comet" ) I guess that our text editor doesn't like french or german letters ((( |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
a pleasure to read...James |
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SkaaDee Member
since 2008-04-07
Posts 116Canada |
very nice Gale. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Impressive piece, dear Gale. Yes I wondered about "Schro", but rereading the poem brought enlightenment. Fascinating event extremely well rendered. Thought provoking too. Margherita |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
James, SkaaDee, Thank you for reading! Thank you, Margerita! I don't know why, but I've noticed that everything is ok, when I use classic Latin letters. In case they are specifically changed like in French or German alphabet, the word containing such letters gets shortened automatically, as if the text editor stumbles there. Schrodinger is Austrian, and his name contains "o" with umlaut. But seems I can't use it, if I want to be understood. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Brief, and yet.. it packed some major punch. Enjoyed this! |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you, Kaoru! |
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