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Carolee
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Carolee |
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KentAshbyKorb Member
since 2013-05-05
Posts 99Nc USA |
Her locks fair East West North South About The wings Of each Bent wind Curls Hot Straightened To hide The rolls And tides Of blatant Coiled Tresses Curly tresses That mock All the worlds Girly dresses Fatigues Can't hide Blatant blue eyed Bright eyed Smiling eyes Formal friendly Kindling Kind Ready to send Melodies Of right ripe Lights "Carolee" Isn't she Bright!!!? And how I knew it? Her tresses said so!!! By how they bent low Went "whoa! Hello!" Ergo my went words Like sent birds To let her know! "You're special" Her facial expressions Let go And made no Mistake of This question I reckon I can't quite account it! Far to many marks to measure By leisure in passing I'll shout it ! "You make an impression!" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
very nice...as I read it I was thinking of the song "Wendy"..."Who's reaching out to capture a moment, everyone knows its Wendy."...James |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I especially enjoyed the rhyme, the clever word play and the stream of consciousness in this. A minor matter, but there is a typo in the fourthlast line - you meant "Far too many marks to measure". Owl |
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