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Gale
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0 posted 2013-10-18 09:57 PM


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It’s raining tonight. I’m walking alone
The sound of my steps and breathing
The windows around me, their pastel glow
Attracting my soul and teasing

Your stormy southwest, I’m feeling the blow
Embracing me, lost and wet…
I’m thinking of people, the people I know
And those, whom I never met

Their house is built, their children are born
Their trees grow high in the yard
And flowers bloom in spite of the thorns
Though thorns make a perfect guard

A beautiful garden, maintained so well
The garden of someone’s dream
The lilac aroma, the drops of bluebells
And maples, and apple-trees

But when I imagine my own home
The sacred place of my heart
I see not the beauty behind the haw
A view from the postal card

I draw the picture of me in the dark
Awaiting for you on the step
The evening is clear with starry sparks
And one is asleep in my lap

My thoughts are serene, for soon you will come
Although you are late sometimes
The wild rose is whispering in the calm
Replied by the candles of pines

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October 2013

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© Copyright 2013 Galina Italyanskaya - All Rights Reserved
KerriB
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since 2013-10-14
Posts 7

1 posted 2013-10-18 11:47 PM


I love the rhythm and sounds in this poem.

Especially like these lines:

"Their trees grow high in the yard
And flowers bloom in spite of the thorns
Though thorns make a perfect guard"

Fine writing.
kerri

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2013-10-19 02:29 AM


This is exquisite, Galina - I think my favourite of all of yours that I have seen.

I can hear it, see it, smell it, and the tears well in my eyes for your longing for him who is not there.

Owl

Gale
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Russia
3 posted 2013-10-19 06:48 AM


Kerri, Owl, thank you both for reading and commenting!
I'm glad that you like this piece )

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
4 posted 2013-10-19 08:20 AM


Lovely poetry, Gale. Delightful to read.

~*~ Your past is just a story. Once you realize this, it has no power over you. ~*~

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376
Midwest
5 posted 2013-10-19 09:12 AM


I liked the mood of this, the rose at the end , outstanding !
Paul D. Hennigan
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since 2009-02-03
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Texas USA
6 posted 2013-10-19 10:31 AM


It flows so well...nicely done!
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
7 posted 2013-10-19 12:14 PM


Found myself sitting on the steps next to you, my friend, invisibly seeing what you see, hearing your toughts, sensing what you feel.

I was there, in spirit/mind, watching . . . waiting.

Excellent piece.

jimmy

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
8 posted 2013-10-19 09:09 PM


nice...James
Gale
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9 posted 2013-10-20 05:46 AM


Thank you, Jerry!
I'm glad that you enjoyed it )
And I'm happy to read your comment!

Gale
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since 2013-06-10
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Russia
10 posted 2013-10-20 05:46 AM


Thank you, Emma Rose!
I think that the wild rose means the same as the dog rose )
But I have to say that I love roses in general. My granddad grew beautiful roses in his garden when I was a little child, and I always loved their aroma and beautiful petals )

Gale
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11 posted 2013-10-20 05:47 AM


Thank you, Paul, for reading and your kind words!
Gale
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12 posted 2013-10-20 05:48 AM


Thank you, Jimmy!
It's great that my poem could take your your fancy )

Gale
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Russia
13 posted 2013-10-20 05:49 AM


Thank you, James!
I appreciate your comment very much!


And thank everyone for reading!

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