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Tomer
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0 posted 2013-09-20 04:04 PM



She touched her heart
only for a roses touch
a shade of her eyes
onto the back of her rustic small house

Small jazz notes
playing with her hair
like a small child's hands digging its hands into the dirt of their front yard

The rise and fall of a woman
never happens under a small nights stage
its when a man decides
to summon a shadow
and slowly part ways
That she finds her heart never touched him strongly enough
never touched the bottom of his lip tight enough
so,
the ebbs and flows
scattered across Tuesdays
until Friday began its catharsis

The silence of a woman's voice
always makes a man uneasy
Its a silence that we often don't understand
of a story far too harsh for us to admit to
far too hard to say in words
silence,
side by side with the nights restless spread.

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1 posted 2013-09-21 01:22 AM


I loved this!
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2 posted 2013-09-22 03:18 AM


every line was magic and the theme was impactful
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3 posted 2013-09-22 06:56 PM


Came back to read this one again, and put it in my library.  Excellent imagery, and mood.
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4 posted 2013-09-22 07:24 PM


I liked this. I really liked this.

~*~ If they give you lined paper write sideways. ~*~

Tomer
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5 posted 2013-09-23 04:14 PM


Mysteria-

Your words are too kind.  I appreciate the positive feedback...I hope you're doing well.  

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
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6 posted 2013-09-23 04:15 PM


Poetically-

Thank you for the beautiful feedback.  Happy you enjoyed.  Hope you're doing well.

Cheers

Tomer

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7 posted 2013-09-23 04:16 PM


Thanks, Jerry.  Happy you enjoyed, my friend.  Hope you're doing well.

Cheers

Tomer

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