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poetically ghetto
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0 posted 2013-09-11 03:14 AM


I was walking down these lonely streets
without a bit of food to eat.

The clouds above were turning grey
with no place to hide and no place to stay.

Raindrops fell with cruel intent
and one step later I was thoroughly wet.

Where did all the people go?

Don't look now! I told you so.

Without a bit of food to eat
my mind has no way to compete.

Delusions, illusions everywhere.

It took some time but I don't care
when swearing at those who passed me by,
who don't ask how, and won't ask why.

I'm walking down these lonely streets
without a bit of food to eat.

                           eric m
                         2013

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2013-09-11 06:32 AM


Eric, felt like a mouse in your pocket- a very miserable mouse. It is always a good thing to hear a voice from the street especially when we are too afraid of the answer we...

"don't ask how, and won't ask why."

Lori  


Michael
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2 posted 2013-09-11 05:31 PM


The eyes say it all.  When somone in the position of that whom you write of looks out to one of us, how many of us are willing to look ino those eyes?  How many more of us just shift our eyes to something... almost anything else, and beeline towards it, avoiding all possible interaction?  Intriguing poem.

Michael

Namyh
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3 posted 2013-09-11 09:53 PM


poetically ghetto - Sometimes when you walk down a city street and see your fear coming at you in the form of some wretched humanity, fright will have you thinking that there but for the grace of God go I and I don't want its contamination. So we avert our eyes. Human nature is a trip! You captured something heavy with this work and I most enjoyed it. Namyh
poetically ghetto
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4 posted 2013-09-12 05:27 PM


thanks for all the kind comments and yeah I can relate to both perspectives. people would be amazed what they can learn from the downtrodden
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