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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2013-09-09 05:43 AM

He stumbled aboard the subway,
Something was strange about his look;
The woman with me gripped my arm
Her face was frightened; she was shook.

Then the derelict sized me up,
I saw me looking back at me;
His eyes were mine; his face was mine,
He was me but how could this be?

His body was ravaged and old,
Greedy for life that passed him by;
He was an outcast in the world,
He dropped his eyes looked like he'd cry.

The woman stared at the old man,
Then turned and looked me in the face;
She mentally transferred her thoughts,
You are that old man through times space?

©June 25, 2013 Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2013-09-09 06:35 AM

That is the kind of thought that'll put a chill down your spine and a cold knot in your gut. Glad it isn't so my friend.
Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2013-09-09 06:39 AM

Me too, Lori, I'm glad it didn't happen, but it very well could have if I'd taken a different course in life. Thank you for being here so early in the morning.

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EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

3 posted 2013-09-09 09:05 AM

there but for the grace of God, go I......
o the places many of us, including you, dear
poet, have been

a good one...

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2013-09-09 09:26 AM

Much obliged, Emma, for the thoughts behind your comments. I appreciate them.

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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2013-09-09 11:23 AM

Powerful write, Jerry.
Ida

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2013-09-09 11:25 AM

Thank you Ida. I appreciate your thought.

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poetically ghetto
Member

since 2004-01-20

Posts 100

7 posted 2013-09-10 03:53 AM

this took me back to my Brooklyn days and riding the subways. looking in the windows always provided me with a distorted view of myself and was a constant reminder of living my life to its fullest really good write

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