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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2013-08-26 07:29 AM



I have walked many friendless roads,
I walked them using my own code.
Though I have faltered I walked on,
Sometimes I'd break into a run.
I left death that would do me in,
Got off that road, stuck out my chin.

©July 31, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper write sideways. ~*~

© Copyright 2013 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 2013-08-26 09:09 AM


To Michael . . . This poem has six lines. Five out of the six have the word "I" in them. Just saying . . .

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Honeybunch
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2 posted 2013-08-26 03:08 PM


Once upon a time when someone tried to teach me to write poetry (unsuccessfully I might add) he said that the use of the word "I" would have more impact on the reader - bring them more into your world as it were.  I perhaps hide behind the "she" or "gypsy lady" or something similar but after all isn't life just a story anyway?  There are elements in every story that we can relate to so I don't think it really matters if we use "I" or not.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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3 posted 2013-08-26 03:53 PM


I've been known to use she instead of I more than a time or two.  Shhh, don't tell, it is a secret.

Lori  

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2013-08-26 04:02 PM


Darn, I shouldn't have left that comment for Michael. Nobody is commenting on the poem. Thanks anyway Honeybunch and Lori.

~*~ If they give you lined paper write sideways. ~*~

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02
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5 posted 2013-08-29 02:39 PM


I comment now.
I I I I I I
like it
it does it for me

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