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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2013-08-01 06:39 AM



childhood memories
can come at any time
like my thoughts
tow-headed kid
and hot summer rain
in small town Arkansas
playing WAR
with my plastic and rubber army guys
in the middle of battle
the raindrops began
soon my soldiers and I were in the middle
of a hot summer rain
bare-chested, wearing cutoff jeans
I left the army where they were
they were soldiers after all
tough, not bothered by the rain
my war game
was being played out
in a bare spot of ground
where a top layer of sandy soil
I imagined the battle was taking place
in Africa
with Rommel's eighth army
I stood and looked upward
baring my half-naked body to the rain
do your best rain
I was as tough as my soldiers
standing there
facing the rain I began to sense
a new smell
I looked down and saw the raindrops
falling onto the sandy soil
pock-marking it with huge drops
the aroma of the rain falling on the sand
I could hear my soldiers say
what'd ya stop for, we have a war to win
I dropped down in the sand which was by then
turning into mud
and led my troops to a final, decisive victory
at the end of the battle
both my army and myself
were covered with mud
I didn't care
my soldiers didn't care
we had won
I gathered the army up and started home
when I got close to home
I saw her
standing outside in the rain
belt in hand
I knew I was in for it
I didn't care
me and my army
had won

©July 29, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton

© Copyright 2013 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2013-08-01 07:17 AM


Oh Jerry

I saw her
standing outside in the rain
belt in hand

That was always a part of everything in your childhood.  I'm so so sorry

Lori



JerryPat2
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2 posted 2013-08-01 07:21 AM


Yeah, should be able to put that behind me, but it rises it's ugly self every so often. Thanks, Lori.

~*~ What do you call a dinosaur with a extensive vocabulary? A thesaurus. ~*~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (08-01-2013 08:24 AM).]

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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3 posted 2013-08-01 07:31 AM


Hey I was having fun with you and your army men up until then.  Reminded me of back in the day with my older brothers. It was a good memory you broght back, thanks.
JerryPat2
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4 posted 2013-08-01 07:33 AM


Yeah, and I spoiled it all, sorry.

~*~ What do you call a dinosaur with a extensive vocabulary? A thesaurus. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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5 posted 2013-08-01 08:23 AM


Not you Jerry- Her! You were the innocent.
You didn't spoil it all. It was a perfect poem of how it was. I'm just glad you do have good memories. Just because I'm an emotional bucket of mush DOES NOT mean you have anythig to APOLOGIZE for. ~L

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2013-08-13 10:36 PM


Fine writing...James
Krawdad
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7 posted 2013-08-14 01:00 AM


Kind of hard on a kid's imagination, ain't it?
swampguy
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8 posted 2013-08-14 07:34 AM


Thank you James.

~*~ The heart does not go backward, only the mind. ~*~

swampguy
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9 posted 2013-08-14 07:34 AM


Yep, sometimes the kid in me still suffers from the past. Thanks for being here.

~*~ The heart does not go backward, only the mind. ~*~

MorningStar
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10 posted 2013-08-14 11:58 AM


Such a vivid memory in so many ways... Both the heights and the depths in this one.

Aenea

"I'll tell you how the sun rose
A ribbon at a time..." - Emily Dickinson

ken206573
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11 posted 2013-08-16 04:46 PM


The poem was wonderful, I could feel the rain, smell wet earth and the sensation of mud upon my own skin. What a memory...beside the part wear a belt comes in... CONGRATS on your VICTORY!! HOORAY!
swampguy
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12 posted 2013-08-16 05:57 PM


Thank you m
Morning Star, as you see I have changed my name here.

~*~ The heart does not go backward, only the mind. ~*~

swampguy
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13 posted 2013-08-16 05:58 PM


Ken, I thank you for your kind words and I don't blame you about shying away from that belt. I had to change my name here, but this is still JerryPat2

~*~ The heart does not go backward, only the mind. ~*~

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