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JerryPat2
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0 posted 2013-07-02 07:05 AM



streets of gold
don't need it if I'm dead
land of milk and honey
don't like milk
but about that honey
paradise to me . . .
would be where
mothers don't beat their children
and families are good to each other
where you can trust strangers
and the music is understandable
if paradise isn't that
I'll pass

©June 17, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

© Copyright 2013 Jerry Pat Bolton - All Rights Reserved
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2013-07-02 10:32 AM


I'm with you all the way on this one my friend! Although I do consider a cold glass of milk heavenly.

Lori

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2013-07-02 10:36 AM


Naw, I'm not a milk drinker. I grew up drinking fresh milk that was delivered to our door. I don't know when I fell out with it, but I did somewhere along the line. Thanks, Lori, it is always good to see you here.

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secondhanddreampoet
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3 posted 2013-07-02 01:08 PM


AGREED! ... well said!!

[and ... rather sad that it's not just
the 'strangers' who can't be trusted!]

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2013-07-02 01:10 PM


I agree Bruce, trust is a long lost commodity. Appreciate your presence here.

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Honeybunch
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5 posted 2013-07-02 03:55 PM


Jerry - I'm very glad you "fell out" of drinking milk.  So many arguments with my kids when they were growing up because their teachers told them it was good for them.  Now they don't touch it.  As for the poem I think it's good to know what paradise would be like for us because we may, in fact, be planning our own future reality. Who knows really?  
JerryPat2
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6 posted 2013-07-02 04:07 PM


I'll tell you the truth of why I stopped drinking milk, Helen. When I was in high school a couple of the guys were having a contest to see how long they could make a string of milk reach from their mouths. It was disgusting, and this was a time when I was a teenager and hardly anything was disgusting to me, but the slimy, stringy milk from their mouths was. From that day on I couldn't force milk down me. As far as forming our own reality of paradise, that is a very good point.

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Honeybunch
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7 posted 2013-07-03 01:45 AM


  Boys will be boys.  The trouble is that a lot of them stay that way and don't grow into men.  Anyway, they did you a favour by turning you away from milk so ... bad turned into good.
Gale
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8 posted 2013-07-03 11:14 AM


It's great, Jerry!

JerryPat2
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9 posted 2013-07-03 11:15 AM


Thank you Gale.

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JerryPat2
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10 posted 2013-07-03 11:17 AM


Oh, I tend to agree with you Helen, about the boys growing into boys instead of men. I think it is a defect in the creator's master plan.

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Margherita
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11 posted 2013-07-03 12:43 PM


You see, dear Jerry, you wish for a world of love and the place we imagine as paradise should indeed be the epitome of IT, with or without milk.

You have expressed your idea of Paradise very well. This our world of duality makes it actually difficult to imagine a place where only Love reigns ... to experience that kind of "honey" we first have to move on, in more than one way I guess.

Enjoyed your work very much.

Margherita

JerryPat2
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12 posted 2013-07-03 12:51 PM


For some reason I CAN picture a paradise even though I live in a world that is certainly NOT one, Margherita. I guess it is because I spent so many years in the gutter of life that now, when I am older, I can envision and appreciate a paradise where truth is supreme and love abounds. Thanks for stopping by, always like o see you here.

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JamesMichael
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13 posted 2013-07-04 01:03 AM


Nice reflective writing...I think of Paradise as a place only my soul will know for my body will return to dust in a season...James
Michael
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14 posted 2013-07-04 01:33 AM


Amen!  Couldn't be any better than that.

Michael

EmmaRose
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15 posted 2013-07-06 09:53 AM


such simple pleasures, can't be bought these days it seems with all the money in the world
sad but sweet sentiments expressed

JerryPat2
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16 posted 2013-07-06 09:55 AM


Hello Michael, and thank you for your timely comments.

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JerryPat2
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17 posted 2013-07-06 09:56 AM


I appreciate your being here with me these few moments, Emma. Thanks for the read and the comments.

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JerryPat2
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18 posted 2013-07-06 10:38 AM


Thanks, James, you have the right idea.

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