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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2013-06-21 11:42 AM


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Pale blue
Cool breeze

Across the street
At dusk
Leaves are dancing

Robins fly
Above the trees

A single gull
Wings its way
Just out to see

The passing wind
Fans the strands
Of her withered hair

And something smiling
In the willow stirs


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Gale
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1 posted 2013-06-22 04:18 PM


I like the imagery of this poem!
Thank you for sharing it.
I would like to write something similar, but I'm not enough poetical, although I love nature )

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2013-06-23 07:59 PM


Love this fleeting moment, and I especially like your title and all that it evokes.
Huan Yi
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3 posted 2013-06-23 08:01 PM


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Thank you both


John


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4 posted 2013-06-24 07:13 AM


There s something about this poem that feels so fresh to me.  It's almost like stepping into the morning when the sun is just peering through the trees and the robins are singing.

A

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5 posted 2013-06-30 02:39 PM


I came back because this poem really hits me in a soft and gentle way.

A

Huan Yi
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6 posted 2013-06-30 02:46 PM


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Alison


Thank you twice


John


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