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Open Poetry #48

Cloud Dream

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

0 posted 2013-05-25 01:32 PM

Mercury light grimaced,widening
open mouthed, through leaden
clouds heavy, streaming silver
puddles onto the ground.
Quickening faster than heartbeat,
nimbus accelerates, wind sweeps
around you, gathering you up
for a distant land,
where hope waits by
waves gently streaming ashore.

music was my refuge.i could crawl into the spaces between the notes and curl my back to loneliness - Maya Angelou

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

1 posted 2013-05-25 02:42 PM

I enjoyed the flow of the poem, the lead in from one seque to another, the currents moving all along in the natural rhythm of
romance

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2013-05-25 02:47 PM

I adore this cloud dream, somehow felt home within your beautiful imagery.

Margherita

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2013-05-27 03:20 AM

Wonderful imagery and magical feel to this, Phil.
Ida

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

4 posted 2013-05-28 04:16 PM

How wonderful to be a cloud. Even if it's just a dream. Enjoyed!

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

5 posted 2013-05-29 03:54 PM

The symbolism in this is very intriguing....had my mind wandering nice work!

~~~kingsangel~~~

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