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A Moving Picture
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A Moving Picture |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
A Moving Picture A heartbeat set against the lifeless red on grey he paints a moving picture along the thread of her coastline and she melts the cityscape to imagine he's there lemon sun bursting kisses trapped in the arms, the weapons of desire a drumbeat set against listing, draining time I can go under if you set my sails toward a foreign smile blackness in hand like an upside down reflecting glass dream, the cracks are starting to show but we'll exchange our hopes to become impossible light to look for the tides that the moon's been missing the brightest point in the night that you see is just a lighthouse clinging to the land with the loneliest human facing the world tears roll down tears roll down, and the importance of subtle actions dulled by smell of your hair Naoko crafted a suicide from ex-lovers' dilapidated hopes and cigarettes hair like brushstrokes of crushed India ink falling from her shoulder like blood from my brain back to the heart walking holes into Shinjuku streets in a madness grip haloed by a moon that's alighting her face somewhere somewhere far beyond the nearest breakdown swept under the carpet breezing into another dream. "What have I become? Truth is nothing yet" -Snow Patrol,'Chocolate' |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Oh, why so sad? ...the lighthouse human. (Don't try to explain. It's just my 'persona' venting. It works perfectly in your poem) You know, before present times, the Japanese wrote with brushes rather than pens. Hmmm, I think, with this poem, you may be displaying an old tradition. Enjoyed!  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Yes, it is sad but you write it beautifully with a touch of whimsy and melancholy. Even the hard lines have a certain sparkle. I'm always a fan, soul drifter dude~ |
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