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Sue_s
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since 2013-03-26
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0 posted 2013-05-07 08:31 PM



Will You

Will you know when I'm gone
before that knock sounds
at the door
Before the phone rings
and someone whispers the news
Will your heart feel the void
before my body is cold

If not, go now
Run before my heart
beats your name
Before each breath
I take, I take for you

I've had  "for now"
I want forever.

© Copyright 2013 Sue_s - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2013-05-07 09:38 PM


Very deep and resounding poetry, Sue_s. I quite agree with wanting forever instead of the lame "for now" excuse. Nice work . . .

~*~ I stayed up all night to see where the sun went. Then it dawned on me. ~*~

2islander2
Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
2 posted 2013-05-08 01:24 AM


this is very sensitive, sue, thanks for the deep and delicate questionings,

yann



Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725
California
3 posted 2013-05-08 01:00 PM


One place or another, a woman has no problem getting attention...  "Forever?"   ...Now, that's a good question and a good vow that even us married couples need to remember.  Enjoyed!    
Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
4 posted 2013-05-08 04:10 PM


We sure could ose a bit of forever these days. Great little poem.
                             Ida

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2013-05-08 10:23 PM


Beautiful...I know these feelings...James
Sue_s
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since 2013-03-26
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6 posted 2013-05-09 01:59 PM


Thank you all for taking the time to read and respond. Much appreciated.

Sue

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