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Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

0 posted 2013-04-29 04:49 AM

"Treble In Mind"

Listen, little fuzzy worm
crawling on the leaf,
others think you have some charm;
I know you are a thief.

You hike the road maps on the veins
of each sprout--every fledgling --
leaving holes where'ere you go
(you kill so gracefully.)

The patterning you leave behind
needed not much clue:
I simply scored the five hard lines
and cleft them unto you.

Not so clever, nor a saint--
neither of us glow.
I just happened on you first-
you died to let my roses grow.

I understand that change will come,
I love your banner when you wing
aloft to skies abundancy...
but oh-my-lord, you sting.

* * *
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AEcTX6sd174

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 2013-04-29 08:10 AM

Lol, good morning K, this one left me with A.F.I.'s "Beautiful Thieves" playing in my head. Enjoyed.

Michael

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2013-04-29 08:12 AM

I heard that, about the sting. I guess we've all had a taste of that. Enjoyed.

~*~ How does Moses make his tea? Hebrews it. ~*~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2013-04-29 12:12 PM

You are such a delight.
I really loved your last verse and all that came before.

Thanks for waving the banner of love and for just being here today, sharing your words.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2013-04-29 05:25 PM

Always loved Janis ... "Maybe" has always been my favorite of hers ---- very cute piece, my friend, and yeah, have had a few of those stings, even one that blistered majorly!

Thanks for posting this.

Speaking of "those" critters, check these out that I just finished, by posting this link in your address bar . . . http://photographybyda.zenfolio.com/p244907360 or , actually I just clicked on it and it worked! Go figure!

j.

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

5 posted 2013-04-30 03:46 PM

Yes, Janice was a Monarch...

quote:
I simply scored the five hard lines
and cleft them unto you

...and, beyond the glow worm, not, I thought the music of Janice and your poem made for a real nice juxtaposition and subliminal kind of tribute to the Queen of psychedelic soul and acid rock. Enjoyed!

Lady Goodman
Member

since 2012-10-04

Posts 193

6 posted 2013-05-02 06:07 PM

I'm just too silly for words.

I do appreciate your kind attention on this one. I never really quit writing, but I posted this'n for Dixie Dear--just to let her know some of us are still around. Rounder, in my case.

The vid is my dear Janis' cover of the original blues standard:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Trouble_in_Mind_(song)

Thanks for indulging me with a read, and I hope you enjoyed the tunage. *hugs*

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