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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2013-03-22 11:00 PM

The measure of music
plays in the recess of my mind
the clarity of words
are a chorus of voices
rewriting the melody
in other words
to a rhythm
so long ago.

A song of wine and roses
and lyrics sung in a whisper
catch in my throat
memories float to the surface
skirting across the pond
tears of joy and sorrow
fall like shimmering stars
shedding light
through the crevices.

A shadow dances beneath the moon
your smile tilts just so
cradled in the crescent
filtering the light like a buffer
softening
the endless surround sounds.

As the music strums my heart strings
like a crescendo builds
a choir in perfect harmony fades
love sings a solo.

Instrumentals carry over
in the still of the night
rocking me gently
as the chorus of your laughter
rewinds
keeping tempo
to the words that might have been.

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

1 posted 2013-03-22 11:53 PM

Beautifully written Lori...heartfelt images of a memory long ago...memories are such sweet sorrow...enjoyed your lovely words and happy to be reading you again...hugss

~Victoria

I was adored once too.
William Shakespeare

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2013-03-23 12:23 PM

Thank you sweetness.. hugs back at you. X/0

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2013-03-23 07:06 AM

The old song . . .

quote:
that might have been.

has a new voice in the words of this well-written poetry, Lori . . .

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2013-03-23 08:06 AM

You make me smile just reading you and seeing you again~~

M

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2013-03-23 12:31 PM

Thank you for your knowing reply JP.

Smiling at you Maureen. Xx. Thanks hon

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2013-03-23 01:54 PM

Not only a wonderful piece overall , simply loved the opening stanza... much enjoyed...

jimmy

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

7 posted 2013-03-23 06:41 PM

a 'penning' most fine and romantic.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2013-03-23 07:03 PM

Hey Jw, thanks so much, I really like knowing what verse stands out.
I appreciate all your kind words and support.

DP~ I thank you for reading and commenting on my work. Means alot, thanks.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

9 posted 2013-03-23 08:09 PM

I loved this love song! You wrote a haunting melody!

lori

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2013-03-23 11:36 PM

I am so pleased you were here. Thanks Lori

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

11 posted 2013-03-25 03:45 PM

Romance at its finest.
You have a soft touch withwords
real nice

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

12 posted 2013-03-25 11:01 PM

So nice of you to say so.
Thank you Emma.

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