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Across the Void |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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a man and a woman lucky in love and precious fate walked in and kissed them both kisses wet, sloppy, thirsty from an unplanned tenderness romance fluttered love came next there was no doubt their chemistry delicious played one off the other's substantial in the beginning of her purring on purpose as fate walked them down the primrose blushing passion concentrated and gifted transalovely dream cooing across the abyss separating them from their naughty they talked of love needful secrets were confessed fragile vowed to leave the past behind shredded and troubled their bond will be sewn husky he closes his eye tender she holds out her attractive together they are damaged ©March 15, 2013 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I fell under your bewitching spell or did you fall under mine it was more than a chemistry attraction intoxicated with your lips of wine. You were early and appeared like the dawn and caught me with nothing on I was dressed in bubbles of sheer chiffon you were my lover, my Don Juan. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Damn, Victoria, your comments are better than my poem. Thank you for being here and reading my poetry and then commenting on it. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damaged goods, i guess better than none  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I hear you, Dixie . . . ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Loving the raw emotion!!!! Good stuff JP~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks a lot, Lori, I appreciate you stopping by. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
I especially like the broken syntax, descriptive words left hanging, you use in this poem and I think it works very well to emphasize the "transa" relational and the "damaged". Enjoyed. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Bob, for your presence here and for commenting on my poetry. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very, very nice...James |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate it James . . . ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Wow! Drop dead wow! Love, love, love it! Yessssssss! lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Aww, thank you, Lori. I love your comments. ~*~ I changed my iPod name to Titanic. It's syncing now. ~*~ |
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