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Open Poetry #48

A Sachet Breeze

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2013-03-17 06:28 PM

Dost thou savor thoughts of thy memories,
and the sayonara tears in mine eyes;
of flawless skin and soft lips of cherries,
whilst watching ambience of the dawn rise.

Hast fingertips touched invisble skin;
each time thee remembers thou were mine.
Tasting sweet thoughts of velvet within,
whilst sachet breeze feels like sunshine.

Dost thou seek thy whisper within the trees;
as emerald leaves serenade the moonlight.
'Tis kiss of thy lips art like a sea breeze;
gently sealed within the darkness of night.

T'was more than a yesteryear ago
henceforth, memories shalt tarry and glow.

I was adored once too.
William Shakespeare

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-03-17 07:06 PM

Love the last line, Victoria, it was perfect for the poem. Like the rest of the poetry it too was unable to put a "period;" a final stopping place for the memories.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2013-03-17 07:16 PM

Thank you Jerry...yes neverending memories...appreciate your input as always.

~Victoria

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2013-03-19 12:07 PM

Really like this style on you, lady Victoria.

A pure pleasure to read.

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

4 posted 2013-03-19 08:00 AM

Thank you Lori...I do enjoy writing those poems...so nice to hear from you and hope all is well.

~Victoria

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

5 posted 2013-03-19 06:34 PM

The style definitely gives your words the feeling of long long ago and I especially like...

quote:
whilst sachet breeze feels like sunshine.

...because it instills the notion that the presence of whatever token or lingering memory taken out still warms the heart. Very nice.

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

6 posted 2013-03-19 07:55 PM

Thank you so much Bob...I am happy you enjoyed my words...nice to hear from you.

~Victoria

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