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Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2013-02-27 11:13 AM

What Will Be

Since my poems weren’t
written for you
I’m still somewhat satisfied
with them.

Over time, I may tweak
a word
here or there
shifting them to fit
the wrinkles, to fill in
the supple.

I won’t rid myself
of their comfort
until the moment when
I notice my passion waning ~
and only then
will I take to them
a match ~

to encompass in a second
the spark, yellow and blue
luminous flames burning oxygen
as if the poems had been life ~

whereby my poems
and I
will become ash and together
return
to our Maker.

© KRJ 2-27-13

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-02-27 11:22 AM

Good to see you making an appearance, Karilea. This one is classic YOU! Your writing, for the most part, gives the reader a chance to catch their breaths before they read the ending and gasp . . .

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~

Sunshine

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2 posted 2013-02-27 11:31 AM

Thank you, Jerry, for your kind and honest words. I've been sharing a bit on Facebook...these last two poems posted today just "came"....and I had to try hard to recapture this one as it hit me in the middle of browning beef ribs for a turn in the slow cooker....I had to grab pen and paper to go back and reform the words...I thought I had just the first few lines [enough by themselves] and then the rest of it just came.

Perhaps my muse came home?

HUGS!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2013-02-27 11:38 AM

I quite understand how poems just "come" to poets, and unless we can get the damn thing written quickly it leaves and never again returns . . .

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2013-02-28 02:19 AM

I often wonder if the great poets, that we still read, thought that their poems would die with them.
Ida

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2013-03-01 08:04 AM

it is so true, poems are burning flames if noone read them, how lovely thoughts,

yann

Kalandria
Junior Member

since 2006-05-23

Posts 44
Yorkshire, England

6 posted 2013-03-03 02:32 PM

I love this poem, relate to this poem and will certainly keep this poem. Excellently done!

niteismyday
Junior Member

since 2012-06-19

Posts 35

7 posted 2013-03-03 09:39 PM

I very much enjoyed this. I liked the change in stanzas.

-nimd

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2013-03-04 09:22 PM

Nice...James

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