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Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2013-02-16 09:06 PM

I walk along the waters edge,
where weeping willows roots grow deep.
Riverbanks flow with grains of sand
flowing deeply with thoughts of you.
A tiny pebble of your smile,
skips over the shimmer of yesterday.
Footprints in salmon and ivory sand,
flows through the hourglass of time.
As the crystal pendulum swings;
I walk along the waters edge
where weeping willows roots grow deep.
Beneath the midnight starry sky,
I slip upon the grapes of love,
within reflections of once was.

~Victoria

[This message has been edited by Victoria (02-17-2013 09:01 AM).]

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-02-17 06:41 AM

This is beautifully done, Victoria. I particularly like this . . .

quote:
where weeping willows roots grow deep.
Riverbanks flow with grains of sand
flowing deeply with thoughts of you.

You thoughts inscribed as poetry is lovely, Victoria.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways . . . ~*~

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2013-02-17 08:50 AM

Thank you dear Jerry, you are always so supportive with my poems. As I told you on email I magically made it disappear after writing it and had to recreate it again ha.
I'm glad that doesnt happen too often.

~Victoria

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2013-02-20 12:54 PM

I think this is one of your best, Victoria.
Ida

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

4 posted 2013-02-20 03:19 PM

Thank you so much Ida, so nice of you to say, and thank you for peeking in today.

~Victoria

Be not ashamed of mistakes and thus make them crimes.
Confucius

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2013-02-22 01:34 AM

so beautiful lines, the reflects of love calling reflects of the nature, this si absolutly good and enjoyable, thanks

yann

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

6 posted 2013-02-22 07:51 AM

Thank you Yann...so nice of you to peek in this morning...I am happy you enjoyed my words as I always try to use nature in my poems and love.

~Victoria

Be not ashamed of mistakes and thus make them crimes.
Confucius

Duck1946
Member

since 2011-05-16

Posts 84
Nebraska

7 posted 2013-02-26 04:37 AM

Lovely, I wish could write like that!

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

8 posted 2013-02-26 07:54 AM

Hey you can Mr. Pitt ha...always nice hearing from you.Thank you for peeking in.

~Victoria

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

9 posted 2013-02-26 11:14 AM

"within reflections of once was."

Your last line is certainly a very poetic image

I like the repetition of the roots of weeping willow, as well, a lovely depth is added by them.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

10 posted 2013-02-26 12:54 PM

Thank you Virginia, Nice to hear from you today...thanks for peeking in

~Victoria

ken206573
Member

since 2008-10-14

Posts 487

11 posted 2013-02-26 03:06 PM

This one is truly poetic and very beautiful. I enjoyed each line, every word was breathtaking.

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

12 posted 2013-02-26 03:33 PM

Thank you for your nice response Ken, I do appreciate you peeking in today.

~Victoria

I was adored once too.
William Shakespeare

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