RS challenge) Imitation of Famous Poets

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Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2013-01-28 01:58 PM

Just a little blend of cummings form and the darkness of Poe
and romance of Ms. Victoria.

in whispering shadows
of
   (a black velvet night)

thunder beats like a drum
within
the percussion of the storm)
and
lightening crashes like cymbals,
as winds of twilight blue

claw like a black panther,
down the windowpanes)

the blood  moon drips with passion)
as a shadow creeps
in the eeriness of the fog.

blue topaz eyes
haunts
the breath of the (midnight winds)

sending  chills down the spine of the dark.

lightning strikes like a leather whip,
(down the curves of temptation)
as his shadow leads the way

( he ascends

the gossamer cobweb staircase)

heartbeat of the dark pounds
as she lay
draped in sheerness of candlelight

below the Gothic ceilings
(and
stainglass windows of her boudoir.

candlelight flickers upon
the wall of seduction)

his heart beats upon her breast,

as her flesh trembles
in the reflection

(of his
dark chameleon eyes

while
her blackberry lips
surrender beneath the realm of night)

RedStoneEB
Senior Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

1 posted 2013-01-28 04:20 PM

I must confess I would of perferred to do a poe piece but his style is really hard to grasp with the flow of his meter and rhyme changing from his Raven to Romance and all his other pieces its all too much for my mind to contend with, but I do love reading his lines, even I have my limits.

Your piece was beautiful

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2013-01-28 04:39 PM

Thank you RS...I'm not an expert either but I had fun writing it. It really wasnt the form of Poe...just the darkness of him. I tried to do the form of cummings in MY SWEET OLD ETCETERA.

~Victoria

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

3 posted 2013-01-28 09:41 PM

I love how your uise of colors and other word choices set the mood for this piece. Very well done
Liz

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2013-01-29 01:07 AM

I agree especially with Liz, the colors grasped my thoughts more than anything else.
They help with the seduction of the mood.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2013-01-29 10:11 AM

Thank you Elizabeth and Virginia, Nice of you both to peek in today...the challenge was quite fun as I like dark romance.

~Victoria

Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs.
William Shakespeare

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2013-01-30 10:32 AM

Loved it, V and it reminded me
of the nights I spent in Richmond
watching Poe movies at the poet's
meeting there and the "nightmares"
I had after.

M

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

7 posted 2013-01-30 10:48 AM

Thank you so much...Nice to see you Maureen. Yes I remember that was a long time ago. HUGSS

~Victoria

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2013-01-30 12:01 PM

couldn't tell you if you're right or wrong so unversed am I in all of this ... but I DID enjoy the words ... on all these challenges you've done recently!!!

j.

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

9 posted 2013-01-30 02:12 PM

Thank you Jimmy...as long as one can tell who I am trying to imitate...the darkness tends to give that away with Poe and of course cummings is known for not using capitals and using parenthesis's and of course a whole lot more than just that. But it was fun writing. Hope all is well.

Miss seeing you here.

~Victoria

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