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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2013-01-24 09:26 AM

Unseen but mindfully enlarged
a picture perfect thus emerged
and walked the path of wishes, hopes,
as comfort for the now deprived.

It strutted, preened, and then enticed
with wares from deep within the soul
and the discard of skin and bone
opened the door to love.

But followed then the rise of sun
on a world unchanged by night’s foray
and I knew not thunder but the bang
of that door once opened wide.

The noise reverberates through time
and dislodges all the moments, years,
from where they’re meant to be
to the floor beneath our feet.

We walk that floor quite unaware
that pressure from our body mass
hurts and wounds love’s essence
and it lingers there close to death.

It lingers, yes, it lingers there,
waiting to rise again
but will it, can it, should it,
when all who tread upon the floor
remain forever unaware?

Helen / 23 January 2013

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2013-01-24 10:51 AM

Heartfelt, deeply moving, and utterly realistic, Helen. Once trod, memories do make. Memories can smile back at you, but beware of those memories who . . .

quote:
remain forever unaware

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2013-01-24 11:57 AM

I like the title Helen and also the mysterious ending of uanaware. A Heartfelt write about memories of the past.

~Victoria

Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs.
William Shakespeare

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2013-01-24 05:29 PM

Unusual visuals that you develop intriguingly, dear Helen. It is indeed always a matter of awareness. And yet, the echoes of love know no obstacles, except those we build ourselves.

Your words are always wonderfully thought provoking.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2013-01-24 05:34 PM

Love the mysterious magick of this one, Helen.
Ida

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

5 posted 2013-01-24 10:42 PM

Thanks everyone! Sometimes the unseen is mysterious simply because we don't understand it. I surely don't but I write it as I see it or rather as I don't see it.

However, as with most things it's as we "think" it is and I think that in the world today love (proper love) is for the most part beneath our feet. It rises in pockets though but too small to make much difference to where the world is headed as a whole. Individually though it makes a big difference.

Helen

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2013-01-25 11:17 AM

"Unseen", but there nonetheless.
Felt, and contemplated in an effort to
rationalize the caused emotion.

Enjoyed the read, Helen!

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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