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Victoria
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0 posted 2013-01-22 03:43 PM



Was it the end of the beginning,
or the beginning of the end?
when we met for the first time.
We were two candles burning bright
burning all through the night,
It was the end of the beginning,
from dusk to dawn.

Was it I who loved you more,
or did I love you less?
when we said our final good byes.
We were two candles in the wind
as moonlight softly kissed our skin;
It was I who loved you more
from dusk to dawn.

I pretended you were mine
in the arms of another time,
holding hands in the mist of the rain.
Two candles burning bright
as tears flowed down the wic of night;
I pretended you were mine
from dusk to dawn.


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Margherita
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1 posted 2013-01-22 03:51 PM


Lovely reminiscing, dear Victoria. Sometimes, even in pretending there is true fire. I enjoyed this much.

Margherita

Victoria
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2 posted 2013-01-22 05:25 PM


Margherita,thank you...so glad you enjoyed and thank you for peeking in today.

~Victoria

Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs.
William Shakespeare

JerryPat2
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3 posted 2013-01-23 01:49 PM


THIS is just good, Victoria. Perfect wordplay as two red-hot coals of love dwindled into scattered ashes of love no more. I loved this one very much.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Victoria
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4 posted 2013-01-23 03:10 PM


Thank you Jerry, Im glad you like it. Your responses are always better then my poems. You should have been a book critic.

~Victoria

CastleGuard
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5 posted 2013-01-24 02:55 AM



Oh yes, those 'dusk to dawn'...pity, get interrupted by days...lol

Lovely and sensual. Liked it much.

CG

Victoria
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6 posted 2013-01-24 08:24 AM


So nice to hear from you CG...its been awhile...happy you enjoyed Dusk to Dawn. Thank you for peeking in.

~Victoria

Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs.
William Shakespeare

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