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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2013-01-14 02:13 PM

She had the roses right hand
where rebecca used to hide
that her neck had a small, light scar
from when she played with her brother
and scraped herself on the edge of the driveways end.

Time was often sound
but now had passed
where her shoulders had broadened
her breasts had softened
and her thighs often wondered
if the hands of a man
could posture themselves enough
so the light of the sun could focus on the sea
rather than the communion of their bodies

She often spoke into the night
on top of the hills where the starry night
blessed the cathedral, the university
that stood upright
so her thoughts often sided, collided
were beside her,
over-watching the sea
as alone to the fields as she was
she held the comfort of the stillness of her body
close to her vest
with her thoughts quietly changing notes
spelling each others quotes under her throat

Until she finally left
in the middle of the night
to another road
she could finally call home.

RedStoneEB
Senior Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

1 posted 2013-01-19 03:13 PM

a very interesting read of a woman and her decisions in life.

RS

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

2 posted 2013-01-20 02:10 AM

Disturbing undertones and overtones of extreme sadness and ultimate pain. When its grip released me, Tomer, the tears flowed.

Owl

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2013-01-21 11:52 PM

Nice writing...James

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

4 posted 2013-01-22 11:17 AM

She often spoke into the night
on top of the hills where the starry night
blessed the cathedral, the university
that stood upright
Very touching Tomer as I could feel the sadness in this one. Enjoyed your words.

~Victoria

Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs.
William Shakespeare

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

5 posted 2013-01-26 06:55 PM

Redstone-

We all take a different path in life. Some more trying than others. Happy you enjoyed.

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

6 posted 2013-01-26 06:56 PM

Owl-

Happy it pulled you in so much and struck a cord. Hope those tears didn't flow for too long. Take care

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

7 posted 2013-01-26 06:56 PM

James-

Appreciate the love. Hope you're well.

Cheers

Tomer

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

8 posted 2013-01-26 06:57 PM

Victoria-

Happy it resonated. I enjoyed that stanza a lot, as well. Hope you're well.

Cheers

Tomer

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