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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2013-01-13 10:22 PM

“I don’t want this anymore”
she cries into the endless night
but nought to hear or feel her plight
when loving you at such a height.

Too far away the love that holds
her heart, her mind, and body, soul,
and so she turns into the wind
that thrashes at her weakened will.

Like a tumble weed she rolls around
in search of you upon the ground
but then the day; love goes away
not meant to be in her “today”.

“I don’t want this anymore”
she cries, she cries, she cries,
and then, of course, she dies!

Helen / 14 January 2013

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 2013-01-14 02:32 AM

I definately felt the ache in this one, and have caught myself feeling that way plenty myself. One musn't overlook the simple daily joys they have right in front of them searching for something greater or for one they've either lost or never had... so I'm told.

Sometimes the ache can be embraced for what it is though, especially with memory, and becomes beautiful in its expression. Maybe others can't see the beauty in this, but I certainly can and do.

Michael

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2013-01-14 02:57 AM

Thank you so much Michael for seeing beauty where other's may see - what? I don't know but perhaps just something different which is their right of course. I'm certainly not blind to my daily "blessings" and "joys" but still there's this thing called love, you know. Yes, I know you know.

Helen

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2013-01-14 09:13 AM

Yesssssss!

Perfect ending when the heart (or even herself) dies from the realization that it is not meant to be. I really, really liked this poem, Helen.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2013-01-14 11:57 AM

Heartache is all over this one.
I guess some people can put others
,in relationships,
on such high pedestals that there is
no recourse to it's ending.

Excellent write, Helen.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

5 posted 2013-01-14 12:44 PM

Thanks, Jerry. So glad you liked it.

JL - Thank you and, yes, you are right. For some strange reason the pedestal and the ending were both meant to be - I just don't understand why.

Helen

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

6 posted 2013-01-14 11:11 PM

ahhh life.. we always want what we cant have dont we..

and when we cant have it, we pout, grab our football, and go home..

we may die for a little while.. but then we go on.. a little bit wiser..

another wonderful one Helen!

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2013-01-15 01:28 AM

very emotional indeed, love can hurt more than anything else, thanks for the very moving poem,

yann

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

8 posted 2013-01-15 02:48 AM

Thank you Richy and yann. Sometimes a want is actually a need but we always play the cards that are dealt and most times with a smile.

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

9 posted 2013-01-18 08:01 PM

Liked the honesty to this, despite the pain

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2013-01-20 11:38 PM

Fine writing...James

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

11 posted 2013-01-22 06:43 PM

Dear Helen, this is a very powerful outcry of your loving and longing heart. To love someone so intensely is beautiful and yet when the feelings are not reciprocated it hurts, so we think "I don't want this anymore" and it would be good to let "them" go and wish them well, but on we go to cling, as if there was no other "horizon".

So true and well said, yet sad.

Hugs.
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

12 posted 2013-01-22 11:08 PM

Thanks Emma, James, and Margherita!

So good to see you here Margherita. You have been missed. Hope you are well.

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