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Promised Land
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Promised Land |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams 
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Promised Land Even the vastness of rolling hills Can submit to the unyielding winds Of the Missouri Valley Grasslands Trees meant to touch the heavens Grow to be frozen and broken down Until limbs weep and branches crawl But from a distance It was beautiful The wind presses elongated strokes While the geese sing to joyous hymns Eager to steal remnants of sunlight Evening haze escapes from the river And illuminates the faint heartbeat; A residual of a lost spirit Forsaken in the Missouri Valley Juju -Juju |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Hi Juju...I thought this was a beautiful painting you created of the Missouri Valley. Enjoyed reading. ~Victoria Love is a smoke made with the fume of sighs. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Juju...this is gorgeous. I saw the movie "Promised Land" and you've depicted it clearly. If we can only be so smart as to not destroy the beauty [anymore] and still restill the sources....what a compromise! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Ha! You know me. Anything you write is wonderful and this no less... enjoyed the piece my friend, and seeing you here again. j. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
ahh, juju, this is one of the best you have ever expressed and I am so impressed. Hope all is well with you.  M |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Fine descriptive writing and told in such economy of words, how a good poem should be...enjoyed the read and the visuals...thank you for the words... Goldenrose. music was my refuge.i could crawl into the spaces between the notes and curl my back to loneliness - Maya Angelou |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
I've never been to Missouri but it sounds wonderful. I can picture your "Promised Land". Nicely done! Kat >^..^< |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"But from a distance It was beautiful" What a gorgeous view, and a stimulating read. Felt I had been there. Loved it to the max! You envision and write scenery so very well. Enjoyed!! JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Great imagery, Juju. Ida |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Juju, this is indeed what I mean when I ask people to once again look at life with open eyes and minds instead of being attatched to gadgets that can only give them a glimps at a time. Thank you for reading my post and sharing yours. jo |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I didn't see the movie, but it can't be as good as this poem, Juju. It is (as your work always is, in whatever way is most appropriate for the specific poem) very beautiful indeed. I basked in your poem, seeing nature in all its magic and cruelty and all the natural nuances of humankind in all its beauty and ugliness and your exquisite blend of the two and all the underlying moods of the poem - and the images and emotions will be with me long after I have pressed the Submit button. Thank you for the experience. Owl |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Nicely done JuJu. I especially like ..."Trees meant to touch the heavens Grow to be frozen and broken down Until limbs weep and branches crawl"... Very descript. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...James |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
beautiful, i love the nice atmosphere of the nature and the spirit of ot, such an excellent reading, yann |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is absolutely stunning Poems of nature are my favorites and you have more that captures it in this poem I am in awe |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
What a spectacular winter scene you have portrayed. You took me there, and the surroundings were breathtaking. Excellent poem, Juju~ |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
I enjoyed the starkness and the lines being filled in with the Natural order |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
I like this a lot. Well done, Juju. Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
quote: Outstanding poetry, Juju. The winter's glaze cracks and bends trees limbs in grotesque shapes, 'tis true, but as you said, from a not too far distant it is a majestic sight to behold. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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