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Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
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Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2012-12-24 12:02 PM



Adam To Eve

You open the Eden
of my fullness
your fingers speak through my lips
I hear the thoughts
of your woman
and I am easy eager
the consequence that lingers.

Temptation
combs its hair in your want
it breathes the longing of forbidden
and in it's cunning
it stitches the scar secrets
in your tree limbs
pregnant with apples.

You are the wet scissor teeth
it knows my willing from taste -
the liquid song of sin spilling
from mouth tears of regret;
It slithers through veins
serpentine
of us
f
a
l
l
i
n
g
inside the fall.

I am you
in love with yourself
I am you
seeking your own love
we are the storm
not the raindrops,
the wing
not the feathers
and while we used to cleave to unknowing
it is ourselves now to which we cling.

Innocence -
a fragrance one cannot rebottle,
so shall a clear mirror
resent being polished.
Hindsight is a heavy hand
of a rose that embraces
the thorns sharpness
of a thorn that cannot comprehend
the sweetness.
Yea, even the hunter who has caught
the shadow of the bird
will never become it’s freedom.

I feel the snake
when I'm breathing
your water and your air
and I curl up
in the lap of confusion
to nurse
at the breast of your despair.

By Melissa Long-Monette


"Poetry is not an opinion expressed. It
is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"
~Kahlil Gibran~

© Copyright 2012 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
1 posted 2012-12-24 11:59 AM


Absolutely LOVED this, my friend!!

Merry Christmas to you and yours....

j.

Balladeer
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2 posted 2012-12-24 02:24 PM


The storm....not the raindrops. The wing...not the feathers....how poetic is that??????

You haven't lost a thing, cutie patootie

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
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by the sea
3 posted 2012-12-26 02:45 PM


fantastic, every word is great and surprising, loved it very much,


yann

Victoria
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4 posted 2012-12-26 04:42 PM


Innocence -
a fragrance one cannot rebottle,

Enjoyed, a lovely thought indeed Honeybee.

~Victoria~

Life is a great big canvas-Throw all the paint on it you can.
  -- Danny Kaye

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
5 posted 2012-12-27 01:28 PM


So much to like here.  

Really nice to see your name on the blue page again.

Happy New year, Honeybee~

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
6 posted 2012-12-27 09:09 PM


Very nice, deep from a distance, but clear.
Excellent read, enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
7 posted 2012-12-29 04:51 PM


Wow! Quite the poem, Honeybee.
                        Ida

Ethern
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since 2010-07-01
Posts 150
on a plane
8 posted 2012-12-31 05:55 AM


the title drew me in because i often use a signatural element of role-play to accentuate the "gist" of many of my works, with Adam and Eve being one of those.

while i couldn't formulate one complete imagination to illustrate this abstract write (i am most impressed by poetry that invokes powerful imagery), i think that it is that same incoherence that forms the unique character that makes this poem so artistic. it is the flippant toying with concepts that makes this a fascinating and fun read.

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
9 posted 2013-01-10 05:26 PM


Too many excellent lines to choose only a few.  I like the all of this, spilling down the page like the perfume of linger.

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding
10 posted 2013-03-29 12:13 PM


oh my... just doing some browsing here tonight and came across this... wow!! The thoughts, the words, the flow... just wow!! Quite the write here Melissa.. been quite some time since I've read you.. too long!!

You can never win or lose
If you don't
Run the race

Psychedelic Furs - Love My Way

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