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Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

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0 posted 2012-12-07 02:52 PM

The whispers of the ocean
calls to me
and memories
are grains of sand
returning with your image
in the wind
near the dunes
where we made love
hiding from peering eyes,
look, but dont touch,
as you tasted forbidden fruit.
You took a bite
and wanted more,
and you were greedy
with desire

I hold you dear to my heart
under lock and key
in the treasure chest of my mind,
Thoughts of you play on
like an old movie,
but you will never be
"Gone With The Wind"
And as you walked away
the whispers in my heart screamed,
like Scarlett O'hara
"Please, please dont go, take me with you"
but you left me feeling
like a common morning glory
within the tousled sheets
of a bad hair day.

Love: A temporary insanity curable by marriage. by Ambrose Bierce

[This message has been edited by Victoria (12-07-2012 05:42 PM).]

Michael

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since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 2012-12-08 12:18 PM

A memory worth clinging to. This was lovely Victoria.

Michael

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2012-12-08 12:53 PM

movely and touching, enjoyed a lot

yann

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

3 posted 2012-12-08 06:55 AM

Thank you Michael and Yann for peeking in, So glad you both enjoyed.

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

4 posted 2012-12-08 08:51 AM

Enjoyed your poem, made me smile.
Ms. E

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2012-12-08 09:12 AM

Im glad I made you smile Ms.E. Thank you for peeking in.

~V~

Love: A temporary insanity curable by marriage. by Ambrose Bierce

Amberzlynnc
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since 2010-08-24

Posts 229
New Jersey

6 posted 2012-12-09 08:26 PM

Great read, thanks for sharing!

-Amber

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

7 posted 2012-12-09 09:39 PM

tousled sheets
of a bad hair day.

Very poetic!!!

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

8 posted 2012-12-10 07:24 AM

Thank you Amber and Balladeer, So nice to hear from both of you.Glad you enjoyed. Happy Holidays.

~Victoria~

Life is a great big canvas-Throw all the paint on it you can.
-- Danny Kaye

[This message has been edited by Victoria (12-10-2012 09:56 AM).]

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

9 posted 2012-12-10 04:35 PM

I thought I'd already replied ... oh well, much enjoyed this anyway my friend and agree with big "B"

j.

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

10 posted 2012-12-10 05:24 PM

Thank you Jimmy, always nice to hear from you and happy holidays to you.

~V~

Life is a great big canvas-Throw all the paint on it you can.
-- Danny Kaye

Stumpjumper
Junior Member

since 2012-12-11

Posts 10

11 posted 2012-12-12 02:21 AM

A pleasant poem, neatly divided in two: 'the act' then 'the feelings in response'.

There's a failure of agreement in the first two lines:

'... whisper of the ocean CALLS to me' or '...whispers of the ocean CALL to me'.

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

12 posted 2012-12-12 07:40 AM

Thank you for peeking in and I tried to change that but its too late but thank you for pointing that out.

~V~

Life is a great big canvas-Throw all the paint on it you can.
-- Danny Kaye

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2012-12-21 05:48 PM

Fine romantic writing...James

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

14 posted 2012-12-21 07:43 PM

Thank you James, and hope you have a romantic weekend. Happy holidays.

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